(09-06-2016, 10:50 AM)Matterplay1 Wrote: [ -> ] (09-04-2016, 10:42 AM)selden Wrote: [ -> ]http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45ce493e2bea5
Technorapture Hypernation
Frequent (mis)use of the acronym THRN instead of TRHN
They were strongly influence by the old transhumanist
should be
They were strongly influenced by the old transhumanist
Fixed these and also several other instances of 'THRN' in other EG articles. Evidently an easy mistake to make...
I frequently have trouble typing letters in the right order!
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b177d3ef3b1
Culture and Society
The section heading
Cooperative Treaties
should be in a larger font to distinguish it from the subheadings in the previous section, consistent with the heading of the subsequent section (Galactographic regions).
The section heading
Galactographic regions
should be
Galactographic Regions
These days, many people like not to capitalize the primary words in a title, but since the previous section heading (Cooperative Treaties) does capitalize both of its words, I think this one should, too.
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/57ea653da24c4
Transaturation Ascension
Tipler Oracle due to it's massive size
should be
Tipler Oracle due to its massive size
as well as due to it's purpose
should be
as well as due to its purpose
might prefer a mobile and more flexible form, maybe, because
might be better as
might prefer a mobile and more flexible form, perhaps because
There's an inconsistent use of single and double quotes. Most are double, so ...
and 'general purpose' basement
should be
and "general purpose" basement
an 'accelerator card'
should be
an "accelerator card"
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/57eabb34719f6
Quantum-random trigger
number problem: "They" is plural, but it's being used as if it were singular.
They consist of a quantum-random number generator
might be be better as
A QRT consists of a quantum-random number generator