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RE: Proof-reading EG - stevebowers - 08-19-2016 Edited; thanks! RE: Proof-reading EG - Drashner1 - 08-19-2016 (08-17-2016, 07:46 PM)stevebowers Wrote: Suggest and/or between Dyson and Matrioshka in both paragraphs. At the moment it reads as if they are all necessary, but they need not all be present. I've updated the page with the and/or element that you've suggested. Thanks! Todd RE: Proof-reading EG - 1of3 - 08-23-2016 The Samelians have been in contact for 9000 standard years according their article. That seems strange for sure. http://orionsarm.com/eg-topic/510a95630431e RE: Proof-reading EG - Drashner1 - 08-23-2016 (08-23-2016, 06:06 AM)1of3 Wrote: The Samelians have been in contact for 9000 standard years according their article. That seems strange for sure. The article as written states: [b]Altogether, this process of identification, observation, analysis, and translation has spanned 9.486 Terragen Standard Years (as of the date of this report) and is still ongoing.[/b] It took me a couple of times reading it, but I finally realized (with the help of the Zoom function on my computer) that the dot is a period, not a comma and the article is saying that contact has spanned 9.486 (nine point four eight six)years, rather than 9,486 (nine thousand, four hundred and eighty-six) years. It might be a good idea to tweak this to say something like '...has spanned nearly 10 Terragen Standard Years (9.486 years as of the date of this report) and is still ongoing.' Todd RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 08-26-2016 http://orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f97a51dbf24 Argus Array archailects don't alway co-operate should be archailects don't always co-operate but third singularitycliological simulations should be but third singularity cliological simulations RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 08-26-2016 http://orionsarm.com/eg-article/478adb4aeb392 Sundrivers, The probes have departed from the cluster probably was intended to be probes have departed for the cluster RE: Proof-reading EG - stevebowers - 08-26-2016 Samaelians, Argus Array and Sundrivers all updated; thanks! RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 08-26-2016 http://orionsarm.com/eg-article/46478dd0d988f Dedicated Hyperturing be used to attack other a transapient directly should be be used to attack another transapient directly is a distraction for the task at hand should be is a distraction from the task at hand These freed d.h's generally should be These freed DH generally freelance d.h. are in high demand. should be freelance DH are in high demand. (the latter two primarily for consistency with the abbreviation used elsewhere in the article.) RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 08-26-2016 http://orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45cbd68bc347f Keter by both cybernetic mission to backward planets, military measures to weed out the unfit and an ambitious program of evangelism within other domains. would be better as by cybernetic missions to backward planets, military measures to weed out the unfit, and an ambitious program of evangelism within other domains. ("Both" means two items, not three) The article also does not mention the population levels of the various types of mondosophonts or transapients. Might that information have been accidentally deleted from the section "Territory and Population"? RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 08-26-2016 http://orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2ad0f11181 9999 AT to Present: (Current Era) And for that reason do even the original Tunnler AIs seem to have developed some strange agendas of their own? tries to be both statement and question. It might be better as just Even the original Tunnler AIs seem to have developed some strange agendas of their own. http://orionsarm.com/page/177 Reunion At Kemmerer The image at the top of the article/story is not being drawn. Selecting the image's link results in the error message Code: Error |