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RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 03-22-2017 http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45bc148c97563 Civilized Galaxy - Sephirotic Empires Hazard Rating: Ysually 0.0 to 1.0; should be Hazard Rating: Usually 0.0 to 1.0; RE: Proof-reading EG - stevebowers - 03-22-2017 Godstars -Fixed Enigma Cluster - Fixed W-Brain -Fixed Da'at Disaster-Fixed Sephirotic Empires -Fixed Thanks! and a new image added to Godstars RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 03-22-2017 Looks great! It seems to me that the articles http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/46f96750760b3 Godstar and http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/462d9a409a10b S-Brain, Godstar should be merged. The former obviously is dated and could have its English usage improved substantially. RE: Proof-reading EG - stevebowers - 03-22-2017 Ah! I wondered what had happened to Bernd's image. Yes- they should be merged - I'll have a go at that in a day or two. RE: Proof-reading EG - Rynn - 03-22-2017 What are the spikes supposed to be? The god star article is old and could do with an update. I interpret one as being a star with a truly massive quantity of magmatter infrastructure to the point that a significant fraction of it operates as a plasma processor. Thus the star who led be intensely active, pumping out vastly more energy than a normal star and probably constantly balanced on the point where anymore energy would cause it to come apart. Thus a god star would be bright, hot, large and relatively short lived. RE: Proof-reading EG - stevebowers - 03-22-2017 I'll add a link to Anders' paper on the subject as well. http://www.jetpress.org/volume5/Brains2.pdf RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 03-22-2017 http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4d483241428ad Nuisances in the direction the inner sphere, The expansion of the should be in the direction the inner sphere, the expansion of the the Oracle War extending as far as the Disarchy). should be the Oracle War extending as far as the Disarchy. RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 03-22-2017 http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4d34d395d27cf Great Ecologist the Great Ecologist has become arisen since the Preservers should be the Great Ecologist developed as the Preservers RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 03-22-2017 http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/464ba71b5823e Disarchy NoCoZo-Negentropy Alliance border was a complicated and infected issue although amusing, probably would be better as NoCoZo-Negentropy Alliance border was a complicated and fractious issue TrueModel factions succeeded from the alliance should be TrueModel factions seceded from the alliance RE: Proof-reading EG - stevebowers - 03-22-2017 (03-22-2017, 07:10 AM)Rynn Wrote: What are the spikes supposed to be? This is just one possible configuration for a godstar. The blue sphere is a dynamically supported magmatter shell, one of many, containing layer after layer of plasma processors. The spikes are magmatter space fountains, dragging waste heat out of the interior and radiating it to space (where it can, if desired, be captured by a series of normal matter matrioshka shells). By increasing the surface area you can reduce the wavelength of emission to something slightly less damaging. |