Proof-reading EG - Printable Version +- The Orion's Arm Universe Project Forums (https://www.orionsarm.com/forum) +-- Forum: Offtopics and Extras; Other Cool Stuff (https://www.orionsarm.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?fid=2) +--- Forum: Suggestion Box - OA website (https://www.orionsarm.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?fid=21) +--- Thread: Proof-reading EG (/showthread.php?tid=678) Pages:
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RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 04-29-2017 http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/475d73cc787c3 Other Self sometime this psychosis is in fact the desired outcome. should be sometimes this psychosis is in fact the desired outcome. RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 04-29-2017 http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/503cd400819a6 Fiarro Twin Worlds, The the use of personality trait adjustment technology are discouraged should be the use of personality trait adjustment technology is discouraged RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 04-29-2017 http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/480a4f64762fd Chaos, The there has been viruses, worms, feral packets, should be there have been viruses, worms, feral packets, RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 04-30-2017 http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/462d55832c31b Daharrans, The neuter nest-tenders who cares for the young. should be neuter nest-tenders who care for the young. RE: Proof-reading EG - stevebowers - 04-30-2017 (04-19-2017, 12:47 PM)QwertyYerty Wrote: Are these dates consistent?The colonies in Jupiter space seem to have been extremely wealthy and capable, but also extremely scared; certain factions there cobbled together an interstellar mission in record time after the Technocalypse, and fled the system ten years later. Perhaps they had a half-built ship all ready to go, but which was no longer required by its original backers(who may have been dead). RE: Proof-reading EG - Avengium - 04-30-2017 The Sophic League article needs links. http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45ce471d24974 RE: Proof-reading EG - stevebowers - 05-01-2017 (04-30-2017, 12:14 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/462d55832c31bAll corrections made up to this point. RE: Proof-reading EG - Matterplay1 - 05-01-2017 (04-30-2017, 09:33 PM)Avengium Wrote: The Sophic League article needs links. Short on leisure time at the moment, so I won't get to this & other suggestions in this thread for a while yet. I'm hoping one of the other editors can. Briefly, though, this same thing applies to a lot of our older material. When we transitioned to the new format for the EG a few years back we had to add all the links back in by hand, and we still haven't caught up; it's a time-consuming task and so those updates only happen when one of us decides to turn attention to a rewrite & re-edit. RE: Proof-reading EG - selden - 05-05-2017 http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/46119aa05cfe5 Brown Dwarf gas giant planets is set at 13 times the mass of Jupiter. should be gas giant planets is about 13 times the mass of Jupiter. "Set" implies that someone arbitrarily defined it to be 13. Rather, that's the lowest mass at which deuterium fusion is believed to be possible. While some rotate around their primary should be While some revolve around their primary The whole paragraph is misleading, suggesting that brown dwarfs always form as part of a multi-object system: While some rotate around their primary like an ordinary planet, many more brown dwarfs exist in the depths of interstellar space, as these small objects are often ejected from the stellar nursery by gravitational interactions with larger stars. It would be better as While some revolve around their primary like an ordinary planet, many more brown dwarfs exist in the depths of interstellar space. Some were ejected from a system by gravitational interactions with other stars while others formed on their own. are very similar to solitary gas giants. should be are very similar to gas giant planets. since not all of either are solitary. RE: Proof-reading EG - stevebowers - 05-05-2017 Thanks! I'll implement those changes shortly. When I wrote this, I intended to suggest that brown dwarfs could form in two ways - like planets, through core accretion, and like stars, by gravitational collapse. This is my own speculation, by the way, and I don't know if either has been ruled out yet. |