(11-25-2017, 11:14 AM)Crossroads Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/467892171fffb

These need to be fixed:

point 60° east

(12-05-2017, 09:10 PM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4902eb14ca7bc
Medius

There is even an intersystem beam rider network that increases travel between the various structures.
might be better as
There is even an intrasystem beam rider network that increases travel between the various structures.

i.e. a beam rider network between structures within the system, since the word "system" is primarily used inclusively, to designate all of the structures and planets orbiting Medius.

(12-08-2017, 08:46 PM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48000b3e907d6
Archivists

I find the dating statement copied below to be somewhat confusing, since it doesn't specify the time from which it's measuring the date. Since the formation of the galaxy? Before humanity existed?

I suggest inserting "ago" or something similar.

The diamondoid outer layer shows a consistent pitting due to micrometeorites that gives a date of 1,452 (+/- 5) million years for its manufacture.

might be better as

The diamondoid outer layer shows a consistent pitting due to micrometeorites that gives a date of 1,452 (+/- 5) million years pre-AT for its manufacture.

(I started to use BAT, consistent with current tendencies to use BCE, but that acronym bothers me for various reasons.)

(12-24-2017, 04:36 AM)Avengium Wrote: How many of the recent posts of this thread are checked and fixed? I want to suggest another pages for proof reading but i think there are still post waiting for check.