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    Thread: A Superior lands on present day Earth...
Post: RE: A Superior lands on present day Earth...

I enjoyed Drakon. I'm not sure of the name of the author but the OA universe met Gwen in a fanfic some while ago. The Draka opened a doorway to the Archailects and were quickly made obsolete. Sorry...
Judgeedee Books, Games, Movies, and TV 4 7,715 10-14-2016, 11:02 AM
    Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: RE: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input

(05-31-2016, 08:29 PM)Rynn Wrote: That seems a lot easier to manage and still quite interesting :) are you going to be posting a new draft soon? Soon!
Judgeedee Creative Writing 17 173 06-04-2016, 05:30 AM
    Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: RE: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input

Hello OA. A quick update on my plans for "Scutum Crux". I've decided to revise this into a shorter story about a departure of the ark and Haddad's inability to cope with the Great Expulsion, and not...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 17 173 05-30-2016, 10:37 PM
    Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: RE: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input

(05-19-2016, 02:43 AM)Drashner1 Wrote: I'm generally in agreement with Rynn re transapients and emotions and them not being humans writ large and being able to observe and control themselves. That ...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 17 173 05-19-2016, 08:57 AM
    Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: RE: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input

(05-19-2016, 12:14 AM)Rynn Wrote: Hi Rynn. Hope I got the quote function working. Here we go! (05-18-2016, 10:18 PM)Judgeedee Wrote: There's an excluded middle. On one side you have transaps ...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 17 173 05-19-2016, 08:23 AM
    Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: RE: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input

(05-18-2016, 11:18 PM)Drashner1 Wrote: Thank you for your input, Todd. I think I have a way forward. First I think GAIA will send monopoles to improve their reach and get the ark as far out there ...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 17 173 05-19-2016, 08:02 AM
    Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: RE: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input

(05-18-2016, 06:13 PM)Rynn Wrote: A few comments, some of which echo Todd's: 3) I'm quite wary about the idea of presenting transapients in such a similar way to humans. Being in love, making b...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 17 173 05-18-2016, 10:18 PM
    Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: RE: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input

(05-18-2016, 12:50 PM)Drashner1 Wrote: These issues will need to be addressed in some fashion if this story is going to work. My initial thoughts, Todd Thanks, Todd. I think GAIA would gift them ...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 17 173 05-18-2016, 09:58 PM
    Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input

So here's SCUTUM's plot and you can weigh in. CaptainSir, thanks for bringing this up. It's a freaking love story! MrHorse and GAIA had a thing before she became She. And once She was She, it end...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 17 173 05-17-2016, 10:16 PM
    Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
Post: RE: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe

(05-17-2016, 01:29 PM)CaptainSir Wrote: Anyways, my point is that by this time the idea of a regressive Islam contrasted with a progressive West would most likely be a dated idea, and was never real...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 20 259 05-17-2016, 09:42 PM
    Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
Post: RE: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe

(05-17-2016, 01:10 PM)Drashner1 Wrote: Ok, I need to get to bed. Getting tired. Will post more tomorrow. Thanks! Todd Thank you for burning the midnight oil for me. Once you've finished your pas...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 20 259 05-17-2016, 09:36 PM
    Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
Post: RE: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe

(05-17-2016, 08:45 AM)CaptainSir Wrote: 600 years from, will this distinction between the Islamic World and West still exist? Will there be a rivalry between them? This seems unlikely, especially be...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 20 259 05-17-2016, 11:03 AM
    Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
Post: RE: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe

(05-17-2016, 01:59 AM)Rynn Wrote: General formatting note: when replying to someone be sure to only quote specific passages as needed. If you quote everything just to generically reply then the thre...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 20 259 05-17-2016, 02:58 AM
    Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
Post: RE: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe

(05-16-2016, 10:55 PM)Drashner1 Wrote: So, truth in advertising: I have not yet read this entire version of the story. However, I did skim it before and during the process of putting it on the forum...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 20 259 05-17-2016, 01:14 AM
    Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
Post: RE: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe

(05-17-2016, 12:20 AM)Rynn Wrote: Feedback part two...   Quote: Her hologram would come to his quarters soon and update him, talk to him, look at him just as she did. Her transmission in light woul...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 20 259 05-17-2016, 01:01 AM
    Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
Post: RE: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe

(05-16-2016, 11:36 PM)Rynn Wrote: (05-16-2016, 09:39 PM)Judgeedee Wrote: Thank you for the feedback. I think adding something about the in-system refugee population is a good idea. I'll let the ...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 20 259 05-17-2016, 12:34 AM
    Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
Post: RE: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe

(05-16-2016, 09:12 PM)Rynn Wrote: Nice entry :) I'm looking forward to seeing more. I've got a few general comments then will go on to specifics: 1) Whilst I appreciate the writing style is an aest...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 20 259 05-16-2016, 09:39 PM
    Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
Post: RE: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe

(05-15-2016, 05:00 PM)Dfleymmes1134 Wrote: I really like this story. This is a good example of how to incorporate OA jargon and write in infodumps. I really enjoy the characterization, particularly...
Judgeedee Creative Writing 20 259 05-15-2016, 10:00 PM