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Thread: A Superior lands on present day Earth...
Post: RE: A Superior lands on present day Earth...
| I enjoyed Drakon.
I'm not sure of the name of the author but the OA universe met Gwen in a fanfic some while ago. The Draka opened a doorway to the Archailects and were quickly made obsolete. Sor... |
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10-14-2016, 11:02 AM |
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Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: RE: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
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Rynn Wrote: (05-31-2016, 08:29 PM)
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That seems a lot easier to manage and still quite interesting :) are you going to be posting a new draft soon?
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06-04-2016, 05:30 AM |
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Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: RE: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
| Hello OA. A quick update on my plans for "Scutum Crux".
I've decided to revise this into a shorter story about a departure of the ark and Haddad's inability to cope with the Great Expulsion, and n... |
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05-30-2016, 10:37 PM |
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Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
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Drashner1 Wrote: (05-19-2016, 02:43 AM)
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I'm generally in agreement with Rynn re transapients and emotions and them not being humans writ large and being able to observe and control themselves.
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05-19-2016, 08:57 AM |
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Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
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Rynn Wrote: (05-19-2016, 12:14 AM)
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Hi Rynn. Hope I got the quote function working. Here we go!
Judgeedee Wrote: (05-18-2016, 10:18 PM)
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There's an excluded middle. On one side you have t... |
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05-19-2016, 08:23 AM |
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Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
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Drashner1 Wrote: (05-18-2016, 11:18 PM)
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Thank you for your input, Todd. I think I have a way forward.
First I think GAIA will send monopoles to improve their reach and get the ark as far out t... |
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05-19-2016, 08:02 AM |
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Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
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Rynn Wrote: (05-18-2016, 06:13 PM)
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A few comments, some of which echo Todd's:
3) I'm quite wary about the idea of presenting transapients in such a similar way to humans. Being in love,... |
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05-18-2016, 10:18 PM |
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Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
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Drashner1 Wrote: (05-18-2016, 12:50 PM)
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These issues will need to be addressed in some fashion if this story is going to work.
My initial thoughts,
Todd
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Thanks, Todd.
I think GAIA wo... |
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05-18-2016, 09:58 PM |
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Thread: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
Post: SCUTUM'S PLOT REVEAL -- your input
| So here's SCUTUM's plot and you can weigh in. CaptainSir, thanks for bringing this up.
It's a freaking love story!
MrHorse and GAIA had a thing before she became She. And once She was She, it end... |
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05-17-2016, 10:16 PM |
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Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
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CaptainSir Wrote: (05-17-2016, 01:29 PM)
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Anyways, my point is that by this time the idea of a regressive Islam contrasted with a progressive West would most likely be a dated idea, and was never r... |
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05-17-2016, 09:42 PM |
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Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
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Drashner1 Wrote: (05-17-2016, 01:10 PM)
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Ok, I need to get to bed. Getting tired.
Will post more tomorrow.
Thanks!
Todd
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Thank you for burning the midnight oil for me. Once you've fin... |
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05-17-2016, 09:36 PM |
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Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
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CaptainSir Wrote: (05-17-2016, 08:45 AM)
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600 years from, will this distinction between the Islamic World and West still exist? Will there be a rivalry between them? This seems unlikely, especially... |
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05-17-2016, 11:03 AM |
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Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
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Rynn Wrote: (05-17-2016, 01:59 AM)
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General formatting note: when replying to someone be sure to only quote specific passages as needed. If you quote everything just to generically reply then the t... |
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05-17-2016, 02:58 AM |
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Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
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Drashner1 Wrote: (05-16-2016, 10:55 PM)
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So, truth in advertising: I have not yet read this entire version of the story. However, I did skim it before and during the process of putting it on the fo... |
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05-17-2016, 01:14 AM |
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Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
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Rynn Wrote: (05-17-2016, 12:20 AM)
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Feedback part two...
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Her hologram would come to his quarters soon and update him, talk to him, look at him just as she did. Her transmission in ... |
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05-17-2016, 01:01 AM |
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Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
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Rynn Wrote: (05-16-2016, 11:36 PM)
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Judgeedee Wrote: (05-16-2016, 09:39 PM)
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Thank you for the feedback. I think adding something about the in-system refugee population is a good idea. I'll le... |
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05-17-2016, 12:34 AM |
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Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
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Rynn Wrote: (05-16-2016, 09:12 PM)
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Nice entry :) I'm looking forward to seeing more. I've got a few general comments then will go on to specifics:
1) Whilst I appreciate the writing style is an... |
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05-16-2016, 09:39 PM |
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Thread: ScutumCrux - A Novel Set in the OA Universe
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Dfleymmes1134 Wrote: (05-15-2016, 05:00 PM)
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I really like this story. This is a good example of how to incorporate OA jargon and write in infodumps.
I really enjoy the characterization, particul... |
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05-15-2016, 10:00 PM |
