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Proof-reading EG
(09-03-2016, 12:50 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49fe9e73e718a
Alexandria Clusters

Unwanted visitors are be deported.
should be
Unwanted visitors are deported.

information-gathering activities.Often this involves
should be
information-gathering activities. Often this involves
(space after period)

Fixed
Stephen
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(09-03-2016, 12:53 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/46ae85c7693a8
Magic Toy Box
[...]

Fixed
Stephen
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(09-03-2016, 01:15 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4bfe37c9056f6
Supersophonts

Fixed
Stephen
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(09-03-2016, 01:29 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/487e62ce90624
SNARE (Siris Nanocyborg Ascension RegimEn)
[...]

Fixed
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(09-06-2016, 10:50 AM)Matterplay1 Wrote:
(09-04-2016, 10:42 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45ce493e2bea5
Technorapture Hypernation

Frequent (mis)use of the acronym THRN instead of TRHN

They were strongly influence by the old transhumanist
should be
They were strongly influenced by the old transhumanist

Fixed these and also several other instances of 'THRN' in other EG articles. Evidently an easy mistake to make...

I frequently have trouble typing letters in the right order!
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b177d3ef3b1
Culture and Society

The section heading
Cooperative Treaties
should be in a larger font to distinguish it from the subheadings in the previous section, consistent with the heading of the subsequent section (Galactographic regions).

The section heading
Galactographic regions
should be
Galactographic Regions

These days, many people like not to capitalize the primary words in a title, but since the previous section heading (Cooperative Treaties) does capitalize both of its words, I think this one should, too.
Selden
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(09-16-2016, 12:19 PM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b177d3ef3b1
Culture and Society

The section heading
Cooperative Treaties
should be in a larger font to distinguish it from the subheadings in the previous section, consistent with the heading of the subsequent section (Galactographic regions).

The section heading
Galactographic regions
should be
Galactographic Regions

These days, many people like not to capitalize the primary words in a title, but since the previous section heading (Cooperative Treaties) does capitalize both of its words, I think this one should, too.

Fixed. Thanks!
Stephen
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/57ea653da24c4
Transaturation Ascension

Tipler Oracle due to it's massive size
should be
Tipler Oracle due to its massive size

as well as due to it's purpose
should be
as well as due to its purpose

might prefer a mobile and more flexible form, maybe, because
might be better as
might prefer a mobile and more flexible form, perhaps because

There's an inconsistent use of single and double quotes. Most are double, so ...

and 'general purpose' basement
should be
and "general purpose" basement

an 'accelerator card'
should be
an "accelerator card"
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/57eabb34719f6
Quantum-random trigger

number problem: "They" is plural, but it's being used as if it were singular.

They consist of a quantum-random number generator
might be be better as
A QRT consists of a quantum-random number generator
Selden
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Both fixed; thanks!
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