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(01-17-2017, 12:49 PM)QwertyYerty Wrote: Sited should be cited

Founded: 4116 a.t. is sited as the official founding date

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49fc14acd42b5
Fixed. I've also added an image, and a few more links and details (while removing the term 'skynet' which I think we should probably purge from the site as too derivative).
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(01-17-2017, 02:39 PM)QwertyYerty Wrote: The word "them" should be included.

At the same time maintenance costs for them were significant; not just in infrastructure but in teams of scientists and technicians to correct any problems in the hardware and software.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48bdab3a92bad
Fixed; thanks!
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49fc14acd42b5
Organic Ascension Alliance, The

WARNING: Members of the OAA takes a very dim view
should be
WARNING: Members of the OAA take a very dim view

4116 is cited as the official
would be better as
4116 AT is cited as the official
to minimize ambiguity

One wormhole connection from Orionis to Aldebaran.
should be
One wormhole connection from Chi-1 Orionis to Aldebaran.
(by itself, Orionis means "of the constellation Orion". It shouldn't be used as an abbreviation of Chi-1 Orionis, although perhaps Chi-1 could be so used.)

The phrase
Eternity was moving towards Orionis,
should be
Eternity was moving towards Chi-1 Orionis,
Selden
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Fixed. Thanks! (some typos from 2003 there).
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What does the bold acronym stand for?

210's - The Vesta-based corporation, Outsystems Launches, begins to make plans for interstellar exploration and colonisation ships, using pulsed fusion drive, RAIR ships, and eventually amat catalysed fusion, eventually becoming one of the Solar System's largest antimatter customers.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b10d8b211
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Ram Augmented Interstellar Rocket (RAIR)
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bussard_ra....28RAIR.29
mentioned on this page
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/493d916fe8faf

Many conversion-drive ships use a ramscoop to collect their fuel and propellant stocks.
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(01-19-2017, 03:42 AM)QwertyYerty Wrote: What does the bold acronym stand for?

210's - The Vesta-based corporation, Outsystems Launches, begins to make plans for interstellar exploration and colonisation ships, using pulsed fusion drive, RAIR ships, and eventually amat catalysed fusion, eventually becoming one of the Solar System's largest antimatter customers.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b10d8b211

RAIR = Ram Augmented Interstellar Rocket - LINK

and the relevant EG page for the time period in question.

Hope this helps,

Todd
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48630634d2591
Magmatter

if they are not there, with a notable exception.with a notable exception.
should be
if they are not there, with a notable exception.

(That last phrase seems to have been accidentally duplicated.)
Selden
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Fixed; thanks!
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What does ESY mean? Is it a typo?

If ESY means a.t., 146 a.t. sounds too early for sophants to have colonized a trans pluto object.

From its first shakedown cruise the Randolph had an active and illustrious career. While picking up crewmembers in Earth orbit the Randolph was directed to monitor the Indonesian invasion of New Zealand and shot down several ballistic missiles from the submarine Saliendra which came too close to American satellites. A month later the USS Randolph and a Brazilian frigate rescued the survivors from the supply transport "Barycenter" and got a warm reception from the public on Juno. But the Randolph's claim to fame was the Xibalba Incident in ESY 146, where the ship faced down a fleet attempting to intervene in that trans-Plutonian planetoid's attempt to break away from Eurasian Union control. The leader of the Xibalba Colony independence movement, Ivan Pieteras, heaped praise on Captain Moreno and crew of the USS Randolph for their daring action (although later it would be discovered that the United States Outer System Command on Chiron had ordered the Randolph to stand firm because of an interest in the Ares-Olympia Corporation's massive holdings on Xibalba and throughout the Kuiper belt, one of a series of scandals in the nearly-autonomous military bases of the outer solar system).

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/486ede76bf934

Reference to simular phrase.

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Trans-Neptunian_object
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