10-24-2019, 01:19 PM
I've now looked at the revised Virtual Reality article and would like to suggest some adjustments.
I'd suggest taking the second paragraph and swapping positions with the third paragraph. So you'd have the paragraph that starts 'A virtual reality...' right after the definitions, and the paragraph that starts 'This term was originally coined...' after that. I'd also suggest moving the paragraph that starts 'Compare with...' to the end of the article.
I'd also suggest putting the term definitions in italics.
Finally, I'd suggest reducing the space between the two large paragraphs as we don't normally put that much space between sections.
Hope this helps,
Todd
I'd suggest taking the second paragraph and swapping positions with the third paragraph. So you'd have the paragraph that starts 'A virtual reality...' right after the definitions, and the paragraph that starts 'This term was originally coined...' after that. I'd also suggest moving the paragraph that starts 'Compare with...' to the end of the article.
I'd also suggest putting the term definitions in italics.
Finally, I'd suggest reducing the space between the two large paragraphs as we don't normally put that much space between sections.
Hope this helps,
Todd