Proof-reading EG

[Drashner1]

What kind of updating should the Nova Terra article have?

I have read a lot of the site but I'm not entirely familiar about the difference between this article and the current O.A. take on the period.

Do you have some examples of how to update it? If I know how it should be updated I can help find places that could be updated and write a replacement for some paragraphs or terms.

As Steve mentions, a big part of the problem is how compressed the history of Nova Terra is. If it is stretched out a good bit, that would help.

Beyond that, there are some typos and sentences in the data panels that appear to stop in mid-sentence. There is also a section on The Terraforming of Nova Terra in which past and present tense are mixed together. Also, there is some mixing of CE and AT dating that makes things confusing.

There is also the description of the use of masers to help propel the initial and later colony vessels, which doesn't quite line up with how we've generally described interstellar missions from the early timeline. Not to say we can't have maser propulsion playing a role - but I'm not sure if it lines up with the bulk of what we've described. So, I think it would be good to look into this to make sure everything is consistent.

Finally, the historical portion of the article is very long and I have to wonder how much is telling an interesting story about the history of the planet and system - and how much is essentially 'filler' that ups the word count and throws everything and the kitchen sink at the article - but doesn't really provide the reader with notable or useful information that is relevant to the current version of the project. I would need to read it through from beginning to end to get more into the details on this, but don't have time for that right now.

My 2c worth,

Todd