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http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oa-m...es-and-art
STORIES & ART

The pictorial icon is broken for the section "MOVIES AND CLIPS FROM ORION'S ARM"
(No picture is shown. Instead the "broken link" icon is shown in its upper-left corner.)
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oa-p...netiquette

is another page containing many black-diamond-question-marks. Unfortunately, many of them obviously aren't replacements for apostrophes and some of them are critical to the meaning of the text. For example, it isn't obvious what symbol was intended for "replace it with [�] to indicate that a section has been removed." An ellipsis, perhaps?

eta:
Some more pages with lots of bdqms are
http://www.orionsarm.com/page/504
Dirty Hands - Pt 1 of 3
http://www.orionsarm.com/page/517
Dirty Hands - Pt 2 of 3
http://www.orionsarm.com/page/547
Dirty Hands - Pt 3 of 3
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4a13ee2483366
Wormhole Termini

Some wormholes are controlled by a dedicated/slaved transapient AI system
probably should be replaced by something like
Some wormholes are controlled by a dedicated non-conscious transapient AI system
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4fe926ed8ac05
Evanescence

many disappearances of Terragen factions
should be
many disappearances on Terragen factions
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/464b88ed2c319
Ferjik, Ken

culminating in the political-educational simulation Cuba (2096).
should be
culminating in the political-educational simulation Cuba (127).
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45e7873ca8b42
Alexandria (Tichy 44-III)

the total capacity of the entire system is around 1036 bits,
should be
the total capacity of the entire system is around 10^36 bits,
or
the total capacity of the entire system is around 10[sup]36[/sup] bits,

Well, apparently not the latter, unless the bbcode interpreter can be enhanced.
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49fe9e73e718a
Alexandria Clusters

Unwanted visitors are be deported.
should be
Unwanted visitors are deported.

information-gathering activities.Often this involves
should be
information-gathering activities. Often this involves
(space after period)
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/46ae85c7693a8
Magic Toy Box

As the defencive barriers go down, the world is be open to the rest of the universe, and its magical inhabitants defenceless against plunder. Within a few decades or centuries (depending on how long it takes news to reach the nexus, the system is invaded by collectors and get-rich types who pillage the planet of any clarketech that can be carried off

should be


As the defensive barriers go down, the world becomes open to the rest of the universe, and its magical inhabitants are left defenseless against plunder. Within a few decades or centuries (depending on how long it takes the news to reach the nexus) the system is invaded by collectors and Clarkers who pillage the planet of any clarketech that can be carried off.
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4bfe37c9056f6
Supersophonts

choose to have smaller muscles and/or muscles,
probably should be
choose to have smaller muscles and/or more efficient muscles,

the construction within the transmogrified sophont's new body a full set
should be
the construction within the transmogrified sophont's new body of a full set
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/487e62ce90624
SNARE (Siris Nanocyborg Ascension RegimEn)

for low-singularity (S1 to S3) ascensions
probably should be
for low-singularity (S1 to almost S3) ascensions

(My understanding is that full S3 requires the mass of a moon to support, so seems unlikely to be appropriate when maintaining an external humanoid shape as the article seems to suggest. Near the end it also says "someone with the SNARE package can jump from SI:0.8 to SI:2.99 in a few seconds" suggesting that a full S3 ascension is unlikely.)

the transcended beings who result is biased
should be
the transcended beings who result are biased

further nanocyborgize it's host
should be
further nanocyborgize its host
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