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Fixed.

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Todd
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Shipyards and Spacecraft Repair Facilities

and carry our minor repairs
should be
and carry out minor repairs
Selden
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(01-15-2017, 02:40 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/587986523169c
Shipyards and Spacecraft Repair Facilities

and carry our minor repairs
should be
and carry out minor repairs

Fixed. Thanks!
Stephen
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198 - Jean Beloit Sampson a third generation orbital tweak baby and one of the original Homo sapiens superior "vunderkinder", organises epic corporate coup and gains leadership of major orbital megacorp Solar Systems Development Corporation (SSDC) on Atlantis Habitat.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b10d8b211

https://www.google.com/search?client=ms-...EXh30yLlUo

wunderkind

a person who achieves great success when relatively young.

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Worst should be "worse".

And if that weren't enough the ship's comm-links, already hampered by time delays and low bandwidth, were being selectively jammed so that any effort to win back their congregation only made things worst.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48f92f7b152b9
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"By" needs to be included.

Even though the Cishp relations with the other colonists were limited, as desired, they began feeling the pressures brought by the newer arrivals.

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Quote:198 - Jean Beloit Sampson a third generation orbital tweak baby and one of the original Homo sapiens superior "vunderkinder", organises epic corporate coup and gains leadership of major orbital megacorp Solar Systems Development Corporation (SSDC) on Atlantis Habitat.
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b10d8b211
https://www.google.com/search?client=ms-...EXh30yLlUo
wunderkind
a person who achieves great success when relatively young.
As explained elsewhere, I'll leave this one- it isn't a typo as such.

Quote:Worst should be "worse".
And if that weren't enough the ship's comm-links, already hampered by time delays and low bandwidth, were being selectively jammed so that any effort to win back their congregation only made things worst.

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"By" needs to be included.
Even though the Cishp relations with the other colonists were limited, as desired, they began feeling the pressures brought by the newer arrivals.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48f92f7b152b9
Both fixed; thanks.
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In should be in.

The powerful moderate Fusionist theocratic Clade Sea of Ch'i cooperated with Terran and Non-Aligned Orbital megacorporate interests to launch several vessels to Sigma Draconis in 414 AT. These later became the Penglai colony. In 470 a number of clades - mostly Atavist and heterodox Fusionist, launched a large colony ship towards Epsilon Eridani, and eleven years later In 491 the New Shoot clade Erotic Ascension embarked on the most ambitious mission of all, a quasi-generation ship, the Rabelais, which was to travel all the way to Iota Horologi. This, the only one of Jovian Quasi-Generationals to make a successful mission, established the Heket colony, later known as Frog's Head.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/464e8caca8b42
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Sited should be cited

Founded: 4116 a.t. is sited as the official founding date

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49fc14acd42b5
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The word "them" should be included.

At the same time maintenance costs for them were significant; not just in infrastructure but in teams of scientists and technicians to correct any problems in the hardware and software.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48bdab3a92bad
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