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(03-14-2017, 09:42 AM)Avengium Wrote: Hi, something more.
In the article Technorapture Hypernation http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45ce493e2bea5 there is a lack of interlinks. I think some links can be added.
For example a link to the short article called "Technorapture".

Also keter, toposophic, ascension, posthuman, bioborg, cyborg, federation, transhumanist, cosmist, omegism, outer volumes, periphery, Ascends and Transcends , Efficiency Maximization Paradigm, blight or perversity, Metasoft .
Etcetera. Big Grin

DoneSmile

Todd
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A question: We can propose additions or rewordings to minor articles?
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(03-14-2017, 10:48 PM)Avengium Wrote: A question: We can propose additions or rewordings to minor articles?

Yes, that's correct.

Todd
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/57efd39d38bb6
Darter Series Inter-Nexus Skimmer

Darter Skimmer boasts 6,000km of Delta-V
should be
Darter Skimmer boasts 6,000km/sec of Delta-V

(or some other appropriate unit of velocity)
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45ce5133c0d94
Utopia Sphere

transapient godlngs close at habd
should be
transapient godlings close at hand
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/486edc9867bac
Pyrenian Klarion Explorer Seedship

The article mentions using "coffins" to dis/embody passengers, but provides no details. It probably would be appropriate to add a link to http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4a3d78dc77e6f "Engenerator Technology" in the "Related Articles" section.
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48571ed9e7273
Wormholes - Cultural Factors

The article mentions that when a stargate is created "the major intellects attend the gate opening." Since the article includes only a short list of extant Wormholes, it might be appropriate to indicate somehow that it is representative of an early date in Terragen history.

Alternatively, since there are so many (millions?) being created "simultaneously" as the Relay system of Y11K expands in all directions, "representatives of the major intellects attend the gate opening." might be more appropriate.
Selden
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This article can probably be combined with one of the other wormhole articles and recorded a bit.

The list of wormholes can be renamed to indicate it just represents some gates, not all of them.

Todd
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/476ecbbab3126
Relay001

the inner stars were converted to ten kilometer gauge wormhole gates
should be either
the inner stars were converted to ten one-kilometer gauge wormhole gates
or
the inner stars were converted to several ten kilometer gauge wormhole gates

Gates with a gauge of 10 kilometers seem a little unlikely to me, although there is the description of Medius having several such in the article at http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4902eb14ca7bc


The article "boasts"
with Relay301 having just come online in 9649

From other discussions, it seems likely that the number of Relays probably was significantly larger than 301 in 9649, and
it might be appropriate to add a vague reference to the much larger number of known Relays extant by Y11K (something like a million 100,000 according to the Wormhole Nexus article: 10,000,000 / 100). However, I assume that the expansion of the Nexus would have been much faster than doubling (1 million in 20 generations), let alone linear, so maybe 301 isn't too unreasonable. (Of course, that fast a replication also implies a rapid expansion of Weylforge manufacturing capabilities, too.)

Sorry, although I seem to recall some mention of plans for more substantive modifications to the description of the Nexus (other than the High Road currently being discussed), I don't recall the details.
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4a13ee2483366
Wormhole Termini

The final sentence
Passage through the hole, even in a modern vessel, takes at least thirty-two days, so these stacked craft can have a long wait. In periods of heavy traffic the Transition region around such a small 'hole may hold hundreds, or thousands of vessels waiting to pass through.

probably should be followed by a mention of the amount of wait time involved rather than letting the reader figure it out: 1000x32 = 32,000 days = ~100 years. In other words, consider a flat-space trip instead of using the congested wormhole.

Actually, it isn't obvious to me to what extent several craft can be transiting a wormhole during that 32-day interval, but presumably a 100 year wait isn't impossible.
Selden
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