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Broken link' "Tweaks"

Several thousand small bubble habitats of various sizes operate in the upper atmosphere of Venus, mostly inhabited by various tweak clades.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/5017ed84be378
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47856727ba67c
Seven Neogenist Lifegivers, The

one ISO Copy of the Seven is currently in relativist transit
should be
one ISO Copy of the Seven is currently in relativistic transit
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45cfc7e44e184
Zoeific Biopolity

A paragraph break is missing before "Associated" between these two data panel entries:

Representative Systems: Arcadia, Biosphere 15, Chios (hedonics center), 009 Ceti, Halford Orwoods, Kdregra (BGC technology), New L4, Haekel Dyson, Harbinger Dyson, Nuidarwin, Sacredtree (Orwood Forest), Timothileary, Zoei MegaCity (Banks Ring)
Associated independent worlds Frog's Head (Genen capital)

A section header is missing in the "Economics and Infrastructure" section of the data panel, before the line of planet(?) names

Biocosm Dyson, Ecotopia, Haekel, Naess, Newjupiyer, Nuidarwin, Nuihibbert, Oceans Unlimited, Singer, many others.

Maybe it's supposed to be "Member Systems:" ?
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/480a3f71b7738
BioGeoComputing

Needs links to several articles. Whisper, Keter, Biovirate, Negentropy Alliance, Outer Volumes,
Needs a hiperlink to Kdregra and a Related articles to Kdregra in the Delphinius region.
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Quote: "Nature considers all the variables".
Quote: "the object and the theory are distinct things"
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/56a75bc63a599
Void Factory

Suggestion:
the statement

It is unknown when the first Sixth Singularity void factory was put into operation.

might be augmented to be

It is unknown when the first Sixth Singularity void factory was put into operation, but it must have been well before the mid-7200s, when the High Road became available for Nexus travel.

as mentioned in
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/58b55a11cbb93
High Road, The


A link to the High Road article probably would be appropriate, too.

p.s. Other constraints on the date doubtless could be developed from other articles e.g. when Black Angels were first seen in warfare.
Selden
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A minor disagreement between articles:

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/5624484e9ce65
Void Pocket

At the Fifth Singularity, it becomes possible to enclose hardened complex devices within a void bubble at the moment of its creation and later release them intact when the void bubble is deactivated.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/493ea0a001290
Halo Drive

At Singularity level 5 Void Bubbles are still mostly "single use" technology, as they cannot be unmade without destroying most contents. Some extremely sturdy materials, such as high-density magmatter cases and certain high-energy magmatter vec clades may be durable enough to withstand the removal of an S:5 Void Bubble, but such reports may be apocryphal.
Selden
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(03-24-2017, 11:28 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45cfc7e44e184
Zoeific Biopolity

A section header is missing in the "Economics and Infrastructure" section of the data panel, before the line of planet(?) names

Biocosm Dyson, Ecotopia, Haekel, Naess, Newjupiyer, Nuidarwin, Nuihibbert, Oceans Unlimited, Singer, many others.

Maybe it's supposed to be "Member Systems:" ?
This section header was visible in the CMS but wrongly coded- it was 'Dyson Spheres or Swarms'
Fixed.
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I noted that Steelcliff did not have an image; it does now.
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/478986428e74a
I've added a paragraph about Tony Jones' observation that may of these alien BCG worlds lie to antispinward of the Terragen Sphere, and may be somehow causally connected to the Low Emission Zone in that direction.

We've got quite a few of these alien BCG worlds in the scenario, and as far as I am aware they are an idea that Tony originated; I note as well that Stephen Baxter has used the concept in his recent Proxima/Ultima series, although whether he was influenced by OA I have no idea.
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/57e2a53f0fad3
Encyclopædia Galactica, The

The grapheme æ (a merged with e) doesn't seem to have translated well in the title and is being displayed as æ

It seems OK in the body of the article.
Selden
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(03-26-2017, 05:19 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/57e2a53f0fad3
Encyclopædia Galactica, The

The grapheme æ (a merged with e) doesn't seem to have translated well in the title and is being displayed as æ

It seems OK in the body of the article.

Fixed. Thanks!
Stephen
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