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The article "Computronium Bell-curve Theory" ends with "or the appetite of black holes with certain appetite." using the word "appetite" twice is a little repetitive and slightly confusing I recommend changing it to " or the appetite of black holes with a certain hunger."
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New Taylor

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Mutual Aggression Deterrence Accord was signed to form the Sophic League in 2314. Reformulationists , enlightenment.

Doubt: There were Mysterians in New Taylor and vicinities or not?

Suggestion: changing capital for "modosophont capital"

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4911a49ba4b44
Sacred Heart

Typo: business business.

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example:  Sophic League, New Taylor, mercurian type planet, Praesepe region, Taurus Nexus breakup, thriving city-planet with a full 16 wormholes, Version War, Wormhole Nexus, virtual warzones of gang warfare and the home of the black market, spaceports , orbital band ,

Suggestion: changing capital for "modosophont capital"

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Ararat

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: high toposophic , nearbaselines , Mysterians ( http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47bb8b1eea5cf ) , Terragen , New Madray ,

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Orobon

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: white dwarf , Main Sequence stars, biont , near-baseline , Mysterian, Huxlyite sect,  Huxlyism, hedonism , 

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Mysterian

Needs more text. For example a backlink to Orobon article inside the text.

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Satyaloka

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic League , starlifted , virtual universes and heavens , high toposophic node worlds , New Taylor , Sacred Heart ,
[see also The Three and the One, and The Transcension of Andapuyaran] .

Three and the One, The - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic League , dyson shells , high toposophic ,

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Transcension of Andapuyaran

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic League , orwood , avatar , eir [pronouns] , transcended into nirvana with yogic calm , remotes , subminds , high toposophic mind , habitat section , augments , godseeds , splice , nexus , small and sparsly equipped shuttle , wormhole terminus , wormhole ai , transcension , ISO , panvirt ai ,

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Anandayanna Nirvana

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic League , Seven Anandayannas , Transcension of Andapuyaran .

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Anandayanna-Uvartarasha War

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Suborg , relativistic seed-node , Kupier mining expedition , eir clone-siblings , godtech , Oort Cloud , relativistic ship , subverted , hider clades , Version War , backups , orbitals , higher toposophic level , hyperturings , memetic , Avatar .

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Seven Anandayannas, The

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: First toposophic neogens , transcended Hyperturing , transapient , Clade , Computronium nodes.

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Ashram

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: habitat , planet , noetic , memetic , higher state or toposophic .

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Kelarc

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: the Reformulation , Sophic League , Ontology , xenobiological.

I suggest adding some related articles to Kelarc.

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Garden of Paradise Cluster

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Ararat , Old Earth , Mysterians , Hamilton Institute , photosynthesis , microecologies ,

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Fractal Brotherhood, The

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Buddhistic , Sophic League , deep space , the sects of inconsequence , nirvana ,

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Sophism (Sophic League)

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sufism and cybersufism , Stella Umma, Neotaoism , Penglai Empire,  habitats, Buddhist , the Questionings of the Universal Church, Genetekker biotantra, Hermeticism, Etodism, Cosmism, Nuagism, and more. spiritual transcendence , old Earth , Empires period , memeticity , habitats , Nexus , clade and phyle , diamondoid ,

Hermeticism, Hermeticist - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: phyle , middle first Federation ,  Old Earth , emanationist cosmology , zones of thought (also called sephirot) , Cyberhermeticism , toposophic or singularity grade , Neohermeticism , sephirah .

Sophic Materialism - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: pantheistic or spiritual-materialist mystical, religious, or esoteric path common in the Sophic League, the TRHN .

Samsara - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic.

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Cosmism

Typo: alter --> later.

Suggested changes: "21st and 22nd centuries of the Earth common era."  --> Old Earth. Also AT.
psycho-historical reconstruction. --> cliological.
Add  related articles section.

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: pantheism , Infotech , hacker baselines, transCyberian cyborgs, Gibsons , AI , singularity-grade AIs , artilects , hyperturing , virches , Sol System , Cyborgs , a.t. , luddist , Kuiper Belt , Oort cloud , nanite plague , Clade Rigel .

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Etodism

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: First Federation.

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Chiri

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: conversion drive.

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Nuage, Nuagism

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: memeticity , Old Earth , First Federation Era.

Magusism - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Occult, Occultism, Occultist, memeticity , wetware , transapientech augments .

Occult Philosopher - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic league.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4758a23c2ccb3
Occult, Occultism, Occultist

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: meme-complexes , stars, planets, gems, colors, chakras, elements, toposophic kingdoms, and phyles , Universal Mind .

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One Soul Movement

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: IA (Intelligence Augmentation) , backups , hypertech , copy , memetic , clades .

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Mechanists, Mechanism

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: philosophy and metaphysics , Industrial Age , memetic , wet , dry , bioists , m-life , hylotech , hylonanotech , biotech , vecs , Sephirotic hypercultures , Metasoft Version Tree , Zoeific Biopolity ,

Materialism - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: ril , vir , MPA .

Meatling - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: vecs, clades, bionts, cyborgs .
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Quote: "Nature considers all the variables".
Quote: "the object and the theory are distinct things"
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More links that we can include in the text of the articles:

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Tahmetianity, The Tahmetian Crusades

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: transapients , Inner Sphere .

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Undyoism

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Taoism , extinct alien civilizations [The Mysterian species?].

Taoism - [article]

Links: Old Earth.

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Yoson Confederacy

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: sophic league , Etodism , Tahmetian Crusaders .

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Chrono-Transcendent Soul, The

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: copy, or intelligent agent, vec, provolve, human or archailect , early Interplanetary Age , Atomic Age theoretical physicist John Wheeler , Terragen Sphere , Materialist ,

Eridanus Mandarin - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Inner Sphere, Yoson Confederacy , Etodists.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/487bb1fc69461
Eridanus League, The

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Nanotech Window , terraforming , Etodism , fast (relativistic) conversion drive ships , wormhole links , Nova Terra , Solsys , Yoson Confederacy , FSA .

When i have more, i will post it here. Good day. Smile
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Minor recommended edit for FreeBirds article. Vacuum adaptations are mentioned twice, a single sentence for freebirds and a the entire last paragraph for "Other subsophont zero-G avian clades" which seems out of place on an article about freebirds. I would change the last paragraph to be about the few freebird clades that were adapted to vacuum.
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"Some Adumbrans transcend to higher toposophic levels, at about the average rate." Remove the word "some", otherwise it refers to only subsection of population not the Adumbran clade as a whole.

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"ranging from simple tetrachromatism to whole new senses."
Can we get a footnote, link or explanation of what tetrachromatism is?
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(11-01-2017, 06:38 PM)MyTrueNameIs Wrote: The article "Computronium Bell-curve Theory" ends with "or the appetite of black holes with certain appetite." using the word "appetite" twice is a little repetitive and slightly confusing I recommend changing it to " or the appetite of black holes with a certain hunger."
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/484f2c25bfcbe

Fixed

Todd
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(11-08-2017, 07:07 AM)Avengium Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/46d4d166cfc6d
New Taylor

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Mutual Aggression Deterrence Accord was signed to form the Sophic League in 2314. Reformulationists , enlightenment.

Doubt: There were Mysterians in New Taylor and vicinities or not?

Suggestion: changing capital for "modosophont capital"

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4911a49ba4b44
Sacred Heart

Typo: business business.

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example:  Sophic League, New Taylor, mercurian type planet, Praesepe region, Taurus Nexus breakup, thriving city-planet with a full 16 wormholes, Version War, Wormhole Nexus, virtual warzones of gang warfare and the home of the black market, spaceports , orbital band ,

Suggestion: changing capital for "modosophont capital"

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f7561809fd0
Ararat

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: high toposophic , nearbaselines , Mysterians ( http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47bb8b1eea5cf ) , Terragen , New Madray ,

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/55784e51e87b3
Orobon

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: white dwarf , Main Sequence stars, biont , near-baseline , Mysterian, Huxlyite sect,  Huxlyism, hedonism , 

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47bb8b1eea5cf
Mysterian

Needs more text. For example a backlink to Orobon article inside the text.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4782f4d9c69a2
Satyaloka

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic League , starlifted , virtual universes and heavens , high toposophic node worlds , New Taylor , Sacred Heart ,
[see also The Three and the One, and The Transcension of Andapuyaran] .

Three and the One, The - [article]

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic League , dyson shells , high toposophic ,

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47a538311fe2b
Transcension of Andapuyaran

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic League , orwood , avatar , eir [pronouns] , transcended into nirvana with yogic calm , remotes , subminds , high toposophic mind , habitat section , augments , godseeds , splice , nexus , small and sparsly equipped shuttle , wormhole terminus , wormhole ai , transcension , ISO , panvirt ai ,

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4605cdc1ed095
Anandayanna Nirvana

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Sophic League , Seven Anandayannas , Transcension of Andapuyaran .

I've gone through the above articles and added some links and done a bit of wordsmithing. Will aim to do more as time permits.

For future reference, it really isn't necessary to list out what additional links should be added for each article. Just saying that the following articles could use more links is fine. The editors can figure it out from there.

Thanks!

Todd
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These need to be fixed:

point 60° east
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Medius

There is even an intersystem beam rider network that increases travel between the various structures.
might be better as
There is even an intrasystem beam rider network that increases travel between the various structures.

i.e. a beam rider network between structures within the system, since the word "system" is primarily used inclusively, to designate all of the structures and planets orbiting Medius.
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