Proof-reading EG

[Worldtree]

https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b27e35ae4
801 - Nova Terra: Erik Atell is killed in crossfire between between the 

Earth is still a shambles

To this end they have believe they have GAIA

The Architect post # 964 

Also in the same article, there is what seems a contradiction:

610 - The remaining Martian ecosystem crashes. Great loss of life, although some refugees escape to surviving orbitals, others to the Belt or the outer solar system. >>>The swarm-ravaged Mars is occupied by Titanite invaders for the next four decades.<<<

But then

622- Refugees in orbit dissolve the Martian Union and establish the Martian Republic.

could delete titanite , and  just keep that vague for now 
those two events could technically happen at the same time - establishing the republic amidst a disaster 

The Architect post # 965


Still in the same article 

621-660 - The Great Expulsion leads to massive emigration of Earth refugees

But then

640 - The expulsion ends, and GAIA dismantles her technological infrastructure and sets (out) to truly restore the planet. The civilizations in space beyond near-earth orbit are apparently ignored

Continuing

9th century - A group of about 20 ships form the Spaceman's League.

(what's wrong with this one ?)



these two posts 964, 965, 966 should probably just wait for a whole-article update to be changed 

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https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/502d136b998e9

drove many into hidding (spelling error, corrected) 

The pervasive danger and uncertainty that characterized the period eventually gave way to the stabilizing First Federation

https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/502d136b998e9 (spelling error, corrected) 

Struggling in the depths of arguably the greatest crisis that humanity had faced (spelling error, corrected) 
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/502d136b998e9

The Martian planetary energy grid is much less extensive than that of Earth (spelling error, corrected) 
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/5017ed84be378

[The Astronomer]

I thought we've decided to retcon the Titanite occupation of Mars? Even if there's an attack, Danger suggested in the Martian Terraformation thread (I think) that it's very unlikely that Mars is going to lose against the invaders, and I agree on that.

[The Architect]

Continuing

9th century - A group of about 20 ships form the Spaceman's League.

(what's wrong with this one ?)

Nothing actually, I misread this one

[Worldtree]

I thought we've decided to retcon the Titanite occupation of Mars? Even if there's an attack, Danger suggested in the Martian Terraformation thread (I think) that it's very unlikely that Mars is going to lose against the invaders, and I agree on that.

ok I'll delete 'titanite'

[selden]

Star too far:

The article https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f9757b533b6 (Argelander) specifies the imaginary(?) star designation JD 344111-890 and says it's equivalent to TYC 8579-870-1. Unfortunately that star was recently measured to be about 1400 LY away instead of the specified 219 LY.

Presumably a new star should be chosen.

[selden]

Another star too far:

The article https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/464f55d50a038 (Fragan Sphere, The) says that the brightest star in its region is HIP 18608, 205 LY from Earth. Unfortunately, recent measurements have placed it about 1100 LY away.

Presumably a new star should be chosen.

[Worldtree]

was in drafts folder-

these terms seem un-needed?
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4675e9adb4ee7
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/52b12ccea56de
womanimal/manimal/ humanimal made invisible

remove from splice page 
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45beac611ad40

[Drashner1]

was in drafts folder-

these terms seem un-needed?
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4675e9adb4ee7
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/52b12ccea56de
womanimal/manimal/ humanimal made invisible

remove from splice page 
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45beac611ad40

Agreed on all points, although I'd actually suggest deleting the two stubs entirely. They aren't terms we have ever used beyond the initial 'throw everything at the wall and see what sticks' phase of the early OA project.

Todd

[TheOkayGuy]

Inconsistency in https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4af5fa1127e47 (Fubas Clone Goo Event)

"Fubaii" and "Fubasii" are both used as the plural of "Fubas", where one term should be used

[Worldtree]

Inconsistency in https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4af5fa1127e47 (Fubas Clone Goo Event)

"Fubaii" and "Fubasii" are both used as the plural of "Fubas", where one term should be used

thank you!