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Consolidating the EG a Bit
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(10-23-2019, 11:22 AM)Dfleymmes1134 Wrote: Virtual reality is up
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47534ad4082c3

i can delete


Virch
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47533cf37d5d4
VR
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/475770bcabc30

I'll take a look at this in the next day or two and post feedback. I'd suggest holding off on deleting the two articles until we've got this finalized.

Thanks for taking this on!

Todd
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#32
I've now looked at the revised Virtual Reality article and would like to suggest some adjustments.

I'd suggest taking the second paragraph and swapping positions with the third paragraph. So you'd have the paragraph that starts 'A virtual reality...' right after the definitions, and the paragraph that starts 'This term was originally coined...' after that. I'd also suggest moving the paragraph that starts 'Compare with...' to the end of the article.

I'd also suggest putting the term definitions in italics.

Finally, I'd suggest reducing the space between the two large paragraphs as we don't normally put that much space between sections.

Hope this helps,

Todd
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#33
fixed

virtual reality
https://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47534ad4082c3
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#34
We should connect the article "Classification of Virch Worlds, The" in the article virtual reality?
It was connected in Virch. This article is going to be a Hub? Virchworld article looks more like a hub.
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