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Illustrated Backstory Redesign
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(07-28-2017, 03:39 AM)Liam Wrote: I'm all for keeping the present tense, given it's not an EG article. But one thing that did jump out at me during the initial read through was the style. We seem to lurch from history-lecturer on page 1 to poet on page 3, and it's a litter jarring.

I'm also not sure what's going on with the first bit of a timeline appearing on page 1. It implies a chronological account, but then doesn't appear again in the next few pages.

Heh. Poet huh? I've been called a lot of things, but never thatTongue

More seriously, the full text that I'm working from, including for page 3 is located here. I'm pretty much just doing a straight lift-n-shift because the text was readily available. We can certainly make adjustments to the text, or replace it entirely, if that's what folks would like to do.

If you (or anyone really) would like to suggest alternative text for any of the pages, please post it here and we can discuss.

The timeline bit is excerpted from the OA Primer. As part of this redesign, I'm essentially combining the Illustrated Backstory and the OA Primer into a single thing. To do that I'm folding parts of the Primer into the Backstory pages, with the results you're seeing here. My goal is to present as much of the Primer as a I can in a format that is a bit less 'giant walls of text'.

Looking at it again, I think I'll replace that bit of timeline with the section of the Primer that talks about the AT dating system. In an upcoming part, I'm planning to put in the section of the Primer about the physical scale of the OA setting.

Thanks!

Todd
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Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 07-24-2017, 01:09 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by selden - 07-24-2017, 09:12 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 07-25-2017, 03:02 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Avengium - 07-24-2017, 09:48 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 07-25-2017, 03:09 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Rynn - 07-25-2017, 03:47 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 07-27-2017, 01:47 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by selden - 07-27-2017, 08:09 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 07-28-2017, 02:55 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Avengium - 07-27-2017, 08:54 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by selden - 07-28-2017, 03:13 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 07-28-2017, 11:49 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Liam - 07-28-2017, 03:39 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 07-28-2017, 12:01 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 08-07-2017, 12:58 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by selden - 08-08-2017, 09:37 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 08-09-2017, 02:56 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 08-18-2017, 01:23 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Avengium - 08-19-2017, 12:22 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by selden - 08-19-2017, 07:30 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 09-12-2017, 01:11 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 09-30-2017, 12:34 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by selden - 09-30-2017, 10:37 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 10-01-2017, 01:06 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 10-01-2017, 09:31 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by selden - 10-01-2017, 09:14 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 10-03-2017, 12:35 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Avengium - 10-02-2017, 01:39 AM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by selden - 10-03-2017, 08:27 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 10-04-2017, 01:00 PM
RE: Illustrated Backstory Redesign - by Drashner1 - 10-09-2017, 06:07 AM

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