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#81
(06-02-2015, 06:41 AM)stevebowers Wrote: I've updated the New Gaia article somewhat-
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48f7d26295d0f

and added a new image. Are there any other edits to the content that might be made?
[Image: newgaia.png]

Nice image. I'll put my article on the list for an an 'cleanup' edit, and if I have any content suggestions in that I'll mention them here. Anybody else who has suggestions, please float them here in the next couple of days too & I'll look to integrating those if there's agreement on them.
Stephen
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#82
Nice image, Steve. Here are two more articles which need some tweaking:

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47fc30971c3c5

Quote:For example A superior who takes up running will rapidly adapt to a level of cardiovascular fitness rivaling that of the best marathoner.

Here's a formatting error; I think that the newline after felinoid should be deleted:

Quote:felinoid
vertical pupils

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47fc2ccba05bf

Quote:only a fee for the the splicing was charged

Quote:A generation of superbabies were growing up into child entrepreneurs are forcing big changes

A formatting error involving a superfluous whitespace:

Quote:as generally attempted in mainstream efforts , weightlessness

Quote:especially the SMI²LEs

Is the following orange word really correct? Shouldn't it be gengineered?

Quote:the GeneTEK faction had geneered their own deep-space subspecies
"Hydrogen is a light, odorless gas, which, given enough time, turns into people." -- Edward Robert Harrison
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#83
I think geneered is a synonym, rather than an error.
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/464e8e23a8b54
I personally prefer it as a word, but it is just a little less clear than the alternative.
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#84
The Chameleon

Quote:The largest face is 2599 meters across, the smallest 2931 meters.
Should be switched around.
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#85
(06-03-2015, 05:53 AM)PortalHunter Wrote: The Chameleon

Quote:The largest face is 2599 meters across, the smallest 2931 meters.
Should be switched around.

FixedSmile

Todd
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#86
The Interplanetary Age article references itself:

Quote:The Interplanetary Age had begun.

(It's an active link in the article.)
"Hydrogen is a light, odorless gas, which, given enough time, turns into people." -- Edward Robert Harrison
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#87
Yeah, that should probably be the Interplanetary Era. Amended.
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#88
Trivia:
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/460c3aec50c95

"Formerly extinct terragen gymnosperms that superficially resemble cycads, but reproduce more like flowering pants."

I think that should be "pLants."
Mike Miller, Materials Engineer
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"Everbody's always in favor of saving Hitler's brain, but when you put it in the body of a great white shark, oh, suddenly you've gone too far." -- Professor Farnsworth, Futurama
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#89
Heh heh - fixed.
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#90
Solsys

The 'more info here' link for the Asteroid Belt leads to the Mars article. It should lead here instead.
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