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(08-08-2016, 06:29 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48acafcb42410
Alpha Star

I think the sentence

"A passing Negentropic probe had noted the state of the system in 4634, and it was without problems that it was passed to the Burdikeer."

would be better as

"A passing Negentropic probe had noted the state of the system in 4634. Since it was without problems, it was passed to the Burdikeer."

Change made.

ToddSmile
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(08-14-2016, 09:56 PM)selden Wrote: Back to typos Wink

http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oa-f...20excluded?

"our focus within the project is humanities expansion."
should be
"our focus within the project is humanity's expansion."

i.e. it should be the possessive, not the plural.

Fixed. Thanks!
Stephen
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(08-14-2016, 10:05 PM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oa-f...Criticisms

"If you can'y find anything dramatic to write"
should be
"If you can't find anything dramatic to write"

Thanks! Fixed that, & patched up the last paragraph a bit too, since I thought the meaning of the older version was not quite clear.
Stephen
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(08-11-2016, 08:31 PM)selden Wrote: Some of the articles on S levels are inconsistent.

The article http://orionsarm.com/eg-article/4a53a8f690f09 (Toposophic Level and Brain Size) stops with S:3. It should at least link to the article http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45c68b98779ad (Singularity Levels).

[other links deleted: I misread them]

After looking at this more closely - Singularity Levels is a topic and is already linked to the article on Brain Size when you get down to the relevant section of the page. The linking also shows up on the Singularity Levels page under the associated articles list.

Thanks!

Todd
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The issues or suggested changes raised in Post # 305, 306, 307, and 309 have all been corrected or made.

Thanks!

Todd
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(08-14-2016, 09:56 PM)selden Wrote: Back to typos Wink

http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oa-f...20excluded?

"our focus within the project is humanities expansion."
should be
"our focus within the project is humanity's expansion."

i.e. it should be the possessive, not the plural.

This appears to have been fixed (meaning someone beat me to itSmile)

Todd
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(08-14-2016, 10:26 PM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oa-f...Criticisms

"the sapient level of intelligence just like you and I."
would be better as
"the same sapient level of intelligence as you and I."


On that same page there are quite a few places where it seems that somebody's word processor inserted non-translatable "smart quotes".

different from Orion’s Arm in detail
should be
different from Orion's Arm in detail"

Wouldn’t that be an interesting
should be
Wouldn't that be an interesting

(known as “vecs” after the AI
should be
(known as "Moravecs" or "vecs" after the AI

just “bigger and better” humans
should be
just "bigger and better" humans

E.E “Doc” Smith,
should be
E.E "Doc" Smith,

I think this is all fixed now. I eventually ended up going through all the FAQs inside the Content Management System and looking for the 'smart quotes have messed things up' symbol. While I found and corrected some of what you list here, in other cases it seemed to be that someone had beaten me to it. Or maybe I just missed it.

If you would like to recheck these and, if there are any still messed up, indicate which FAQ question they are a part of (the FAQ Q&As are each separate entries in the CMS) that would be very helpful.

Thanks!

Todd
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(08-14-2016, 10:05 PM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oa-f...Criticisms

"If you can'y find anything dramatic to write"
should be
"If you can't find anything dramatic to write"

FixedSmile

Todd
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(08-14-2016, 10:26 PM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oa-f...Criticisms

"the sapient level of intelligence just like you and I."
would be better as
"the same sapient level of intelligence as you and I."


On that same page there are quite a few places where it seems that somebody's word processor inserted non-translatable "smart quotes".

different from Orion’s Arm in detail
should be
different from Orion's Arm in detail"

Wouldn’t that be an interesting
should be
Wouldn't that be an interesting

(known as “vecs” after the AI
should be
(known as "Moravecs" or "vecs" after the AI

just “bigger and better” humans
should be
just "bigger and better" humans

E.E “Doc” Smith,
should be
E.E "Doc" Smith,

Ah, those pesky things. The bane of every word-processor to html transfer, it seems. I hope I caught them all. Fixed up a couple of other items on that page while I was at it. Thanks!
Stephen
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(08-15-2016, 08:06 AM)Drashner1 Wrote:
(08-14-2016, 09:56 PM)selden Wrote: Back to typos Wink

http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oa-f...20excluded?

"our focus within the project is humanities expansion."
should be
"our focus within the project is humanity's expansion."

i.e. it should be the possessive, not the plural.

This appears to have been fixed (meaning someone beat me to itSmile)

Todd

Sorry about that; we must have gone into the editing system at almost the same time. Will note changes as I make them & watch for yours too to save time all around.
Stephen
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