08-19-2016, 04:31 AM
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4817c2cc10200
Transcendence Blights and Perversities
Suggestion:
Usually these are merely tempered and modified by the new sophont's more advanced cognitive structures, hugely increased processing powers, and massively expanded data base.
might be better as
Usually these are merely tempered and modified by the transcended sophont's improved understanding, supported by cognitive structures, hugely increased processing powers, and massively expanded data base.
resulting in a mental breakdown of in the transcension process.
should be
resulting in a mental breakdown during the transcension process.
Transcendence Blights and Perversities
Suggestion:
Usually these are merely tempered and modified by the new sophont's more advanced cognitive structures, hugely increased processing powers, and massively expanded data base.
might be better as
Usually these are merely tempered and modified by the transcended sophont's improved understanding, supported by cognitive structures, hugely increased processing powers, and massively expanded data base.
resulting in a mental breakdown of in the transcension process.
should be
resulting in a mental breakdown during the transcension process.
Selden