Proof-reading EG

[stevebowers]

I remember the Ousters; they aren't really all that much different from the Hiders or Backgrounders- the closest analog might be the Deeper Covenant. I'll just remove the reference.

[selden]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/484dcf19ae5c8
Collective Mind Societies

critics to the collective mind model of the Amalgamation has also questioned\
should be
critics to the collective mind model of the Amalgamation have also questioned

the collective externally may appears to grow more diverse it internally tends to fairly quickly
should be
externally the collective may appear to grow more diverse internally it tends to fairly quickly

[selden]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/481148c5462d9
Supporting Minds in the Red Star M'Pire

computronium has allow these third toposophic
should be
computronium has allowed these third toposophic

improve and expand the contacts Per developed among the fourth singularity beings
should be
improve and expand the contacts Per had developed among the fourth singularity beings

[selden]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45ce3f35333da
Red Star 'M'pire

and consoling both during the process
probably should be
and counseling both during the process

(although those who fail to achieve their goals doubtless need consoling, too.)

a star with it's own Dyson node.
should be
a star with its own Dyson node.

[selden]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49123d408d6f2
Hellfire Expansion, The

most of the pioneers origin from NoCoZo
should be
most of the pioneers originate from NoCoZo


http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/491232472b626
Tabridgen

re-biosphere schemes fro those whose habs
should be
re-biosphere schemes for those whose habs

[stevebowers]

Fixed; thanks!

[Avengium]

Hi, i think this article: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47a53c6e7b8a2 Transhuman needs hyperlinks.
I suggest [[posthuman]], [[transhumanism]], [[ascend]] and [[memetics]].

Regards, Angel.

[Avengium]

Hi, i think i found a lapsus in this: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/573b16276c2ee EmotSpace Virchworlds
"This has a few consequences, including that no two sophonts can ever have exactly the same emotional state in these four metrics,"
6 emotions, 6 dimensions, not four.

[stevebowers]

Both fixed; thanks!

[Avengium]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/483aec8a1fb1b Virtual Gardens
"providing a outlet for baseline and near baseline creativity that has often become discouraged by interactions with higher topographic beings."
Topographic -> toposophic.