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Is this a typo? Would it make sense that the Cishp would be exporting nitrogen to the belt?

231 - The colony on Titan became important to the Belt as a source of nitrogen, and the first experiments using Geoflex Computing occur on Enceladus.

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When the ship arrived at Titan in 216 AT the colonists awoken to find the congregation back in the Earth/Luna system had been subverted. It seems that as soon as the colonists had entered cryostasis a fierce, 10 year long, memetic war was launched on those left behind by the new faith's rivals. This war was planned well in advance of the ship's launch, in fact it's now known that the purchase of the ship itself had been secretly subsidized by at least two of Earth's major religions of that time. And if that weren't enough the ship's comm-links, already hampered by time delays and low bandwidth, were being selectively jammed so that any effort to win back their congregation only made things worse.

Although there is no doubt the faith's leaders had intended for their ship to make multiple trips to bring most, if not all of the congregation to Titan that was now seen as a lost cause. Some of those on Titan blamed the colonisation project for their loss of the congregation but most just dismissed them as never being true believers in the first place. Over the next few years driven by fear of further contamination which could lead to further loss of members the colony's population became more fanatical, secretive and intolerant, which eventually led them to break off all communications with the solar community. These faithful now began call themselves the Cishp, in reverence of their founder they now referred to as the prophet Aurek Cishp.

As the colony maintained radio silence many believed that the colony had perished under the pressures of surviving in Titan's hostile environment. To the people of earth they were thought to be gone and lost, a belief that was only reinforced by a gruesome act of deception. When the colony first detected the approach of newcomers they opened up their tombs and moved the frozen bodies into the abandoned surface habitats. The faithful were able to remain in stealth mainly because they had made a gradual migration over the preceding century to the subsurface ocean where they obtained new energy resources and materials, slowly dismantling their old wind farms and abandoning surface strip-mining as they did so.

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C.e. to a.t. change. See bold.

Displaying talent and competence admirable even for a superior, by 241 a.t. (2210 c.e.), he had expanded SSDC and made it a premier Cis-lunar power, incorporating with a few well-selected mergers such prime terran-based megacorps as Honda and Lockheed-Boeing. Finding the association with groundcars and aircraft too restrictive a market, he restructured the megacorp around space exploration and development, despite being still very much in the shadow of Lee Orbital. Following mergers with Yang and Mitsubishi, Sampson spun off a leaner, meaner SSDC as a wholly-owned subsidiary that could keep covering the market for ground vehicles, space craft, and other heavy industries. In 273, Samuel died from a sudden allergic reaction following a rejuvenation treatment. His mind was uploaded into the company AI core (despite corp propaganda reports to the contrary, no more than 46% of the personality remained intact), and his wife, the glamorous and rapacious Violetta Han-Sampson, took over and ran the megacorp for the next ninety-five years.

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198 - Jean Beloit Sampson a third generation orbital tweak baby and one of the original Homo sapiens superior "vunderkinder", organises epic corporate coup and gains leadership of major orbital megacorp Solar Systems Development Corporation (SSDC) on Atlantis Habitat.

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In 199 a.t., predicting both the chaos that was to soon occur on Earth with the rising power and independence of the digital nations, and the outsystem crises that would follow the breakaway of the ex-GeneTEK Genetekker communities, Sampson ousted SSDC's conservative management team in a coup of epic proportions. Once in control, he struggled to position SSDC for growth in the challenging times ahead.

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(02-07-2017, 02:27 AM)QwertyYerty Wrote: Is this a typo? Would it make sense that the Cishp would be exporting nitrogen to the belt?

231 - The colony on Titan became important to the Belt as a source of nitrogen, and the first experiments using Geoflex Computing occur on Enceladus.
It is relatively easy to obtain nitrogen on Titan, by skimming the thick atmosphere of that world using scoopships; most of the Belt will be deficient in nitrogen, since the asteroids have low escape velocities and ammonia ices would be rare. But the colder transneptunian objects might be better sources, since the exports would not need to escape Saturn's gravity well.

I think nitrogen would be in sufficient demand for habitat atmospheres and biological growth to justify exports from both sources. The various Martian terraformation attempts would need as much nitrogen as possible, and if Zubrin is correct, this could be obtained from the outer system. But Titanian nitrogen exports could supply less demanding markets.
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269 - Work begins on the first Museum Ship, the Pliny, in Clarke Orbital Docks.

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Work on the Pliny began in Clarke Orbital Docks in AT 270 thanks to a grant by a consortium of Infomining Corporations, including Global Knowledge Transplanetary and Delphi Cislunar, although design problems and constant bickering between the science team (who wanted a ship big enough to store everything), the engineering team (who wanted it to be a viable vessel with sufficient Delta-V), and the corporate sponsors (who were concerned about spiraling costs and constant delays), meant that the vessel was only launched some 12 years after the planned 274 date and was too small for the scientists and too unwieldy to satisfy the engineers.

(Also this is a huge sentence. Should it be broken down?)

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Would we want the date to be 269 or 270?

Agreed that the sentence is too long. Suggested corrections below:

Work on the Pliny began in Clarke Orbital Docks in AT 270 thanks to a grant by a consortium of infomining corporations, including Global Knowledge Transplanetary and Delphi Cislunar. Design problems and constant bickering between the science team (who wanted a ship big enough to store everything), the engineering team (who wanted it to be a viable vessel with sufficient Delta-V), and the corporate sponsors (who were concerned about spiraling costs and constant delays), meant that the vessel was launched some 12 years after the planned 274 date and was too small for the scientists and too unwieldy to satisfy the engineers.

Not major changes, but breaks it into two sentences and cuts out a couple of words. I'd be fine with cutting out the stuff in parentheses as well, but wanted to know what others thought.

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254 - The academic faction of Tir Sorcha Habitat pushes for starting a mining venture on other asteroids to aid the economy of their tiny nation.

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In 255 the academic faction began to push for starting a mining venture on other asteroids to aid the weak economy in their little nation.

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Early Artificial intelligent entities were limited in scope by bloatware problems, sometimes known as King Gnuff's Curse. A new class of entities which had an entirely new form of mentation, the first transapients (the S:1s), emerged in secret some time around 320 AT.

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350 - several artificially intelligent entities are believed to have breached the First Singularity barrier in secret.

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I'm going with 350 this time, I think.
Fixed.
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The Starfarers manned mission, the first manned mission to the stars, a breathtaking step (equivalent to the late Industrial Apollo Lunar mission and Middle Information Age Mars missions in terms of relative expense) launched towards to Tau Ceti in 365. The goal was four-fold: to further consolidate the system, set up a laser / microwave beam station, undertake preliminary terraforming of Nova Terra, and establish facilities for the next wave of colonists. The crew were second generation Starfarers, adjusted for longevity and prolonged hypersleep, born and bred to colonise the stars. The vessel itself, the Tsiolkovsky, using a combination of boostbeam and antimatter-catalysed fusion drive attained a maximum velocity of 0.099 c, an astonishing speed for this early era. The 123 year mission involved rotating shifts in which at any one time most of the crew would be in hypothermal (cryonic) suspension.

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364 - The colony ship, the Tsiolkovsky ,the first manned mission to the stars, is launched towards Tau Ceti, a breathtaking step (equivalent to the late Industrial Apollo Lunar mission, and the Middle Information Age Mars missions in terms of relative expense).

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