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I notice a lot of one-year discrepancies here; these are probably caused by the process of converting from c.e. to AT.
I'll go for the later date in most cases. 365 it is.
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(02-07-2017, 12:29 PM)Drashner1 Wrote: Would we want the date to be 269 or 270?

Agreed that the sentence is too long. Suggested corrections below:

Work on the Pliny began in Clarke Orbital Docks in AT 270 thanks to a grant by a consortium of infomining corporations, including Global Knowledge Transplanetary and Delphi Cislunar. Design problems and constant bickering between the science team (who wanted a ship big enough to store everything), the engineering team (who wanted it to be a viable vessel with sufficient Delta-V), and the corporate sponsors (who were concerned about spiraling costs and constant delays), meant that the vessel was launched some 12 years after the planned 274 date and was too small for the scientists and too unwieldy to satisfy the engineers.

Not major changes, but breaks it into two sentences and cuts out a couple of words. I'd be fine with cutting out the stuff in parentheses as well, but wanted to know what others thought.

Todd

I've updated the timeline to match the Museum Ship article and the Museum Ship article as described above.

Thanks!

Todd
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45ce432e44565
Solar Dominion

A prematurely truncated line of text?

personal self-actualisation of the individual citizen or zar (lit.
probably should be
personal self-actualisation of the individual citizen or zar (lit. 'lord').
Selden
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Identical typo on several pages:

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45bc1c29a38b5
Other Major Polities, Empires, and Meta-Empires

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49133df63a101
Grand Confluence, The

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45e38b2fcd0bf
Orion's Arm - Encyclopedia Galactica - Systems & Worlds S - T

http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oaeg-alpha&letter=S
Orion's Arm - Encyclopedia Galactica - Entries starting with 'S'

A stellar cluster (IC 4756)in the Serpens Sector,
should be
A stellar cluster (IC 4756) in the Serpens Sector,
Selden
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330 - Stasist AIs gradually reach a consensus, after marginalizing the ahumans and their incompatible plans.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b10d8b211

Over time, the stasists did gradually reach a consensus around 401 a.t. (2370 c.e.), but only after marginalizing the ahumans with their incompatible plans. These anti-humans joined the solipsists in a quiet outward push: as interstellar exploration had become increasingly feasible, the solipsist fraction has begun infiltrating outward-bound probes (often instigating their construction and inserting themselves as the true payload, a technique later used by their descendants in silicon generation) or even constructing early nanotech von Neumann probes.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49a7d33abf557
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325 - The stasist AI "0110110", Shaftoe's Freemarket Hacking Conglomerate and the Al Gea Riyad cluster crash and rebuild the Sudanese market.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b10d8b211

During the 3rd and 4th centuries a.t. the stasists were busy building empires, but ran into each other all the time. There were simply too many AIs and too many unrelated plans going on - the classic example is how the Zürich Orbital ai "0110110", Shaftoe's Freemarket Hacking Conglomerate and the Al Gea Riyad cluster crashed and rebuilt the Sudanese market in 326. The dynamists worsened the situation by allowing further ais, encouraging both cyborgization and superbright humans, helping cosmist groups and promoting the spread of smart software such as the FES. The stasists responded with repeated attempts to create an 'AI Government' (the dreaded AI OverGovernment of anti-ai propaganda) to coordinate all AIs and bring others into the line, but AI-AI diplomacy was not particularly subtle and the goals often mutually incompatible.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49a7d33abf557
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378 - Retroviral attack on Flamsteed crater leads to development of Genematode defence package.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b10d8b211

407 - Outbreak of retroviral typhoid on the Luna settlement at Flamsteed crater. Following this, GeneTEK develops a modified nematode as an antiviral/antibacterial agent.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b1a3d9417

Following the outbreak of retroviral typhoid on the Luna settlement at Flamsteed crater in 377 a.t., Genetek developed a nematode-like defence system as an antiviral/antibacterial agent. At first expensive the treatment soon became indispensable.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/464e8b536e1c7
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48645c02a68f1
Marrowbone Armor

since it's creation.
should be
since its creation.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4610062377d94
Body Armour

became more intelligent their developed the combat mecha.
might be better as
became more intelligent they developed into combat mecha.
Selden
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(02-09-2017, 10:02 PM)selden Wrote: Identical typo on several pages:

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45bc1c29a38b5
Other Major Polities, Empires, and Meta-Empires

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49133df63a101
Grand Confluence, The

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45e38b2fcd0bf
Orion's Arm - Encyclopedia Galactica - Systems & Worlds S - T

http://www.orionsarm.com/xcms.php?r=oaeg-alpha&letter=S
Orion's Arm - Encyclopedia Galactica - Entries starting with 'S'

A stellar cluster (IC 4756)in the Serpens Sector,
should be
A stellar cluster (IC 4756) in the Serpens Sector,

Fixed- that is just one typo, in the 'minor article' The Sparks. It is repeated on every page that the Sparks article is related to.
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(02-10-2017, 12:32 PM)QwertyYerty Wrote: 330 - Stasist AIs gradually reach a consensus, after marginalizing the ahumans and their incompatible plans.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45b2b10d8b211

Over time, the stasists did gradually reach a consensus around 401 a.t. (2370 c.e.), but only after marginalizing the ahumans with their incompatible plans. These anti-humans joined the solipsists in a quiet outward push: as interstellar exploration had become increasingly feasible, the solipsist fraction has begun infiltrating outward-bound probes (often instigating their construction and inserting themselves as the true payload, a technique later used by their descendants in silicon generation) or even constructing early nanotech von Neumann probes.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49a7d33abf557
In the article about Ahuman AIs, these events are described as occurring between 300 AT and 500 AT, so it is possible that both figures are correct; but since both articles seem to refer to the same event, we should really synchronise them. Let's go for 401.
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