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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/480ea7e345b24
Neuropsychism, Neurochauvinism

Neuropsychism, sometimes known as neurochauvinism is a set
should be
Neuropsychism, sometimes known as neurochauvinism, is a set
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4b2e2a0099621
Aruan, Clade

such as sibling the Aruan's sibling clade
should be
such as the Aruan's sibling clade
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/539b9e0167be6
Athenaeids

only provides 1 calories of useful energy
should be
only provides 1 calorie of useful energy

While Athenaeids mature into familiar, human-like form,
might be better as either
While Athenaeids mature into the familiar human-like form,
or
While Athenaeids mature into a human-like form,


McKendree Cylinder pair known as "Fata Morgana,"
should be
McKendree Cylinder pair known as "Fata Morgana II,"

since it links to the article on Fata Morgana II, not the one on Fata Morgana.
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/480fdadf8692f
Redux Strategy, The

exists somewhere Terragen civilization's future,
should be
exists somewhere in Terragen civilization's future,
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/53b3584f9faf6
Fata Morgana II

joined together by "dog bone" trusses*,
probably should be
joined together by "dog bone" trusses,
since there doesn't seem to be a later section of the article to which the asterisk might link

The final, rel Fata Morgana II design
should be
The final, real Fata Morgana II design

roleplaying to sooth and defuse social tensions
should be
roleplaying to soothe and defuse social tensions
Selden
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In the EG article about Clade Darwin http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47e9b998ec996 are missing some hyperlinks.
Zoeific Biopolity, Zoea, avatar, Known Net, sophont , sub-sophont , transapient, Vec, and some more.

Also there is a miswrite:
"Such forms may then grow, manufacture, or or use other equipment".
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Quote: "Nature considers all the variables".
Quote: "the object and the theory are distinct things"
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(03-30-2017, 05:13 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/46d38510904a3
Neural Implant, Neural Interface, DNI

that enhances a bionts sensory ability
should be
that enhances a biont's sensory ability

Fixed.
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(03-30-2017, 05:27 AM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/480ea7e345b24
Neuropsychism, Neurochauvinism

Neuropsychism, sometimes known as neurochauvinism is a set
should be
Neuropsychism, sometimes known as neurochauvinism, is a set

Fixed.
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(04-11-2017, 06:10 PM)selden Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4b2e2a0099621
Aruan, Clade

such as sibling the Aruan's sibling clade
should be
such as the Aruan's sibling clade

Aaannd - FixedSmile
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The issues raised in posts #713-716 are all updated.

Thanks!

Todd
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