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(06-15-2017, 06:26 PM)selden Wrote:
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Only incidences of the disorder are well known and recorded in the entire history of the Terragen Sphere,
seems to be missing the actual number of incidents. If one counts only those described in the article, it should be
Only two incidences of the disorder are well known and recorded in the entire history of the Terragen Sphere,
Fixed; I've edited this article a little to update it as well.
(06-16-2017, 06:17 AM)Avengium Wrote: Sagittarius Transcultural Cooperation

Could have more links. For example: Version War , Sagittarius Sphere , hyperturings, Dominion, Negentropist and MPA, Inner Sphere, AI.
Done. I've edited it slightly- the Dominion is presumably the Keter Dominion, rather than the Solar Dominion, and I've added the Sagittarius NoCoZo which seems to have been significant in this region but hasn't been mentioned yet.
Reply Version War, The

Quote:The Voyage of Admiral Tka Lett-Vorek — Myth and Reality
One of the most extraordinary figures of this time was Admiral Tka Lett-Vorek, the commander of the Interpolity Combined Expeditionary Fleet. This much is known as fact. In 4520 the neutral system of Peta Dromanis was attacked by Metasoft autowars pursuing a damaged and fleeing Dominion corvette, the Captain Whitkar, which had been granted temporary sanctuary in the system, with the loss of twenty million lives. The previous disparate world-states united under the local superpowers of the Idao Orbital Band, the Thomasborogh Hegemony, and House Valinder-Laton to avenge the atrocity, and protect their borders from further incursion. After some squabbling over who should lead the expeditionary force, in 7523 the eccentric but popular Admiral Tka Lett-Vorek was placed in charge.

The 7523 should be 4523.

The monotech drive table has an error, it mentions internal fission drives more then once. I am assuming the bottom one was supposed to be Internal Fusion. 
Possibly inertial fusion.

"I'd much rather see you on my side, than scattered into... atoms." Ming the Merciless, Ruler of the Universe
I think that 'internal' is probably correct - it refers to propulsion whether the fission or fusion reaction is contained, as opposed to occurring externally and pushing against a 'pusher plate' - as in a Project Orion external pulse system. There is a fairly arbitrary line between internal and external - it depends on the shape of the 'pusher plate' or containment field, I suppose.
Reply Version War, The
The 7523 should be 4523.
Authenticity Purges, Authenticity War

This article need links. For example: Re-Evaluation period , Solar Organisation , Fomalhaut FAS , Terran Federation.
All fixed; I've added an article to the Authenticity page as well.
Hazard Rating

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Ken Ferjik, Interstellar Age, toposophic levels, memeset, fundamental sentient rights , Sephirotic, Deeper Covenant, transapient, transapientech, blight, synsect, ahuman.

"sapient being" maybe should be "sophont being". Also link.
9999 AT to Present: (Current Era)

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: Empledok-cetic , Outer Volumes , Cygexba , Jean Te Uahlg Aestheticism, Old Earth, Verifex, Gehenna cluster, Carina Wormhole network, "the Chaos".

Quote:10400 - The population of the Impossible Dyson reaches 22 trillion; Venus population reaches 2 billion

I think this population has to be revised.

Quote:the Paradigm might be brewing some "offspring expansion spheres" in the periphery, the Amalgamation wants in as usual ("Feed me!"), the NoCoZo is trying to make a buck from all of this, Keter doesn't answer calls ("Keter is not in right now, It is contemplating the All. Please call again next kalpa"),

This part looks like something comic, or humorous, not like an encyclopedia.

Quote:. Every civilisation from the distant past has fallen eventually; will the same thing happen one day to civilisation in the Orion Arm?

This reminds me Ozymandias.

And on the pedestal these words appear:
'My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
Look on my works, ye Mighty, and despair!'
Nothing beside remains. Round the decay
Of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare
The lone and level sands stretch far away.[1]

^ Percy Bysshe Shelley, "Ozymandias"

Another article to add links: The Chaos

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example:  PanVirt , Carina Wormhole network, Negentropy Alliance , The Solar Dominion, Caretaker Gods and Metasoft Version Tree , The Cyberian Foundation, NoCoZo, Utopia Sphere , Mutual Progress Alliance, Sophic League and Communion, Perseus Princes, Amalgamation, Keter ,
This article need links too: Free Sophic Polities

Links to: Minds (with caps) , NoCoZo - Sophic League , ComEmp and Re-Evaluation periods , Cyborg , Fast Meditation Orbital Chain , Hyperutilization Supremacy.

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