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(07-02-2017, 07:42 PM)Avengium Wrote: The previous posts need revision. Also:

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/46212d...Efficiency Maximization Paradigm

The article need section titles.

Also need hyperlinks in the text. (For example): early Fragmentation (post-ComEmp) period, Precepts of Negentropy, memeticists, obscionists, Heinlim Intercessor clade of cyborg superbrights on Habitat Ashton, Morpheo A II named Paz, anti-Gabriaelist breakaway faction of the Universalist Church, called The True Universal Church, founded by Broderik Paz, YarrMakist,  the Axioms, rim-ward Crucis Corridor region ,  Negentropist-NoCoZo-Utopia-NoCoNeg , Habitat Asmof , Second Federation Period,  Version War, Standardizationist Clade Borup , Wormhole link, Cyberian Network , superbright clades, including the Malovitches ,  Vakt Ecohabitat, Disarchy worlds , Zua Ban vPuthr, or First Avatar vPuthr , Keterist , Linguistic Monitor clerk 3rd Class ,  Aleph Absolute , Singularity , Merriam Language Surveillance Datapolls ,  nanoreplicators , Morpheo - Dashwood wormhole , the Council of Interstellar Powers (the successor to the old ComEmp), Daveth tweaks, the NoCoNeg situation, the re-emergence of Geminga orthodoxy,  Oshi-Durtam Web disaster, Orion Federation , Dyson spheres , "The Wilds", as the region outside the reach of the Civilised Galaxy was now termed, first Federation, later Imperial period and after - the Dominion, Metasoft, Keter, etc. , In 5465 the Paradigm Containment Organisation , Utopia Sphere worlds, the Dominion, the Negentropy Alliance, the Mutual Progress Association, the Sophic League, and Metasoft. , Second Consolidation War, ISO , the Galactic Heritage Preservation Act (which forbids rampant destruction or modification of pristine solar systems); bionts , aioids , computronium , ai-viruses , linelayer, The Seat of Judgement , Jekaumeatrine Accords 5559 , Godtech , transapientech,  Kalyptic , Universalist, Omegist, Chaoticist, Eschatologist , Amalgamation , Biovirate , .

Hope this help. Smile

Edit: you can search in a page with Control + F . i think this is an easier way to search for keywords.

Based on earlier conversations, I think (or would like to think) that we will be doing a major update of this article in the fairly near future. As such, I'm going to recommend skipping adding links or section titles for now, since the structure of the article could change considerably - also such things could be added as part of a larger overhaul of the article.

Todd
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4 issues in a one paragraph article:

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f995454be75

"Many subsapient organisms (a number of types of lower animals, plants, and microbes) are asexual and reproduce by rhizomes, by budding or [by] fission. Several alien sapient species are asexual. Some terragen sapients likewise choose the option of asexual bodysculpting so as not having a sex at all. Asexuals feel that the whole sex thing is too complex and problematic, better to just the whole thing out of the way. Any bodymod can do this, they are referred to as "hir" and "shhe" when a specific (gender) pronoun is required. Asexuals can and do love platonicaly and feel joy at having children, but they don't feel lust."
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Also, we still have a lot of posts in this thread, waiting.
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(07-18-2017, 07:46 AM)Crossroads Wrote: 4 issues in a one paragraph article:
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f995454be75


I rewrote this article slightly, since we already have a neuter gender in the article about sexual genders. I have defined an 'asexual' as someone who is both genderless and without sexual desire; it seems entirely possible that some neuts have entirely satisfactory, if somewhat cerebral, sex lives.
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(07-02-2017, 09:58 PM)Avengium Wrote: http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45cd3dcc18626 Orion Federation

The article need a larger datapanel. Ruling toposophic: Enremdeaorion.

The article need hyperlinks in the text. For example: ComEmp, Christmas Tree Cluster ,  Enremdeaorion , Eden AI symbiosis solution , Wormhole Nexus , ComEmp Ontology , Saint Warwick Rebellion , Objector Alliance ,
Done (note that not all of these subjects have articles of their own yet)
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(07-05-2017, 03:17 AM)Avengium Wrote: Communion of worlds EG article. http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45cbc752f41f8

We could made the line symbol more complete including: "The original symbol is actually a flower pattern made out of the silhouettes of human heads.".
Done - new image included as well.
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/596dfb09acae1
Ontology

The introductory paragraph has too few quote symbols. Apparently the "close quote" symbol is not recognized and a ? is shown instead.

A curious thing about the ontological problem is its simplicity. It can be put in three Anglo-Saxon monosyllables: "What is there?? It can be answered, moreover, in a word—"Everything?—and everyone will accept this answer as true. However, this is merely to say that there is what there is. There remains room for disagreement over cases. On What There Is, Willard Van Orman Quine, 21 BT

should be
A curious thing about the ontological problem is its simplicity. It can be put in three Anglo-Saxon monosyllables: "What is there?" It can be answered, moreover, in a word—"Everything"—and everyone will accept this answer as true. However, this is merely to say that there is what there is. There remains room for disagreement over cases. On What There Is, Willard Van Orman Quine, 21 BT

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/478434a56eb65
Second Federation Ontology

and fermented discontent
should be
and fomented discontent

(despite the amusing images it foments Smile )
Selden
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Fixed- thanks!
(I would never have picked up that 'fomented' typo in a month of Sundays)...
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(07-19-2017, 03:43 AM)stevebowers Wrote:
(07-18-2017, 07:46 AM)Crossroads Wrote: 4 issues in a one paragraph article:
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f995454be75


I rewrote this article slightly, since we already have a neuter gender in the article about sexual genders. I have defined an 'asexual' as someone who is both genderless and without sexual desire; it seems entirely possible that some neuts have entirely satisfactory, if somewhat cerebral, sex lives.

I like the rewrite. Reads better without the phrase "the whole sex thing."  Tongue

EDIT: Also, both of the ontology related articles just linked to, under Related Articles, under Ontological Conservatives, state: "Text by M. Alan Kazlev from from Anders Sandberg's Transhuman terminology"
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Fixed- thanks!
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