Proof-reading EG

[selden]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48000b3e907d6
Archivists

I find the dating statement copied below to be somewhat confusing, since it doesn't specify the time from which it's measuring the date. Since the formation of the galaxy? Before humanity existed?

I suggest inserting "ago" or something similar.

The diamondoid outer layer shows a consistent pitting due to micrometeorites that gives a date of 1,452 (+/- 5) million years for its manufacture.

might be better as

The diamondoid outer layer shows a consistent pitting due to micrometeorites that gives a date of 1,452 (+/- 5) million years pre-AT for its manufacture.

(I started to use BAT, consistent with current tendencies to use BCE, but that acronym bothers me for various reasons.)

[Avengium]

How many of the recent posts of this thread are checked and fixed? I want to suggest another pages for proof reading but i think there are still post waiting for check.

[stevebowers]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/467892171fffb

These need to be fixed:

point 60° east

Fixed. Thanks!

[stevebowers]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4902eb14ca7bc
Medius

There is even an intersystem beam rider network that increases travel between the various structures.
might be better as
There is even an intrasystem beam rider network that increases travel between the various structures.

i.e. a beam rider network between structures within the system, since the word "system" is primarily used inclusively, to designate all of the structures and planets orbiting Medius.

I've edited this page significantly and added another image.
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4902eb14ca7bc

[stevebowers]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/48000b3e907d6
Archivists

I find the dating statement copied below to be somewhat confusing, since it doesn't specify the time from which it's measuring the date. Since the formation of the galaxy? Before humanity existed?

I suggest inserting "ago" or something similar.

The diamondoid outer layer shows a consistent pitting due to micrometeorites that gives a date of 1,452 (+/- 5) million years for its manufacture.

might be better as

The diamondoid outer layer shows a consistent pitting due to micrometeorites that gives a date of 1,452 (+/- 5) million years pre-AT for its manufacture.

(I started to use BAT, consistent with current tendencies to use BCE, but that acronym bothers me for various reasons.)

Fixed. I used the term Before Present, a convention often used by archaeologists, since this is a xenoarchaelogy article.

[stevebowers]

How many of the recent posts of this thread are checked and fixed? I want to suggest another pages for proof reading but i think there are still post waiting for check.

I think we are up-to-date now.

[Avengium]

In post #842 there are articles still not revised. To see what is missing, check the original post.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f7561809fd0
Ararat
Lack of links. Mysterians ( http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47bb8b1eea5cf )

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4782f4d9c69a2
Satyaloka
Lack of links.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/47a538311fe2b
Transcension of Andapuyaran
Lack of links.

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4605cdc1ed095
Anandayanna Nirvana

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f0d7dce0d46
Anandayanna-Uvartarasha War
Lack of links.

And many other articles in #842.

Also articles on post #843 too. And #846 seems to be pending too.

[stevebowers]

Thanks! Working through them now.
See, for instance
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f0d7dce0d46

[stevebowers]

I've now edited all the articles since post #843.
Thanks!

[tmazanec1]

http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/45f4886ae0d44 near the bottom

These may systems be regarded as 'demon-nets' by trespassers
systems may