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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/4b9f2a844034a
Toposophic Levels and Mental Abilities


Presumably this is one of several articles which will be getting a workover to conform to some of the characteristics described in the new S-specific articles, but in the meantime, here are a few typos that I found and some suggestions to slightly improve clarity.
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consistent between themselves.
should be
consistent among themselves.

("between" is used for two items, but in this case more than two are being discussed)
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structures know in the academic places as meta-knowledge.
should be
structures known in the academic places as meta-knowledge.
and might be better as
structures known in academia as meta-knowledge.
or perhaps
structures best described as meta-knowledge.

(While the prefix meta- might have been very uncommon at the time the article was first written, that's certainly not the case now.
Anyone trying to keep up with hifi technology and the new 3D audio formats has had it beaten into them Wink )
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a description suitable for one an S3 entity will fail to fit another one.
should be
a description suitable for one S3 entity will fail to fit another one.
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one portion of an S3 mind know exactly what is going on
should be
one portion of an S3 mind to know exactly what is going on
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It is believed that S3s uses specific
should be
It is believed that S3s use specific
Selden
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Fixed. (This very interesting essay was written by someone for whom English is not their first language. Despite this I think it is very well-crafted)

The meaning of meta- as a suffix seems to have shifted recently. Metaphysics has the sense of 'beyond physics', and metamorphosis means 'to change in shape or quality'. So it can mean 'change', or being 'beyond' or 'an extension of' something.

But the most common use of meta- these days is 'together with' or 'about', so that 'meta-data' means 'data about data', or data accompanying the main data; and meta-knowledge, which is knowledge about knowledge or the mechanism behind it. The term 'meta' by itself just means 'recursively self-referential, as in 'that's so meta'.
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/493f29cc472f0
Reactionless Drives

Reactionless drives can only be created by beings with a toposophic level greater than S4,
should be
Reactionless drives can only be created by beings with a toposophic level of S4 or greater,
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-topic/492d6fafbef2a
Second Toposophic - High Transapients

The illustrations intended to show S2 body types are the same ones used in the S1 article and include text saying that they are of S1s.

The links to stories, at the bottom of the article, fail with a 404-fnf error.

http://www.voicesoa.net/festival-season/
 probably should be http://www.orionsarm.com/page/602

http://www.voicesoa.net/an-interview-wit...xcellency/  
probably should be http://www.orionsarm.com/page/604

http://www.voicesoa.net/hanami-park/  
probably should be http://www.orionsarm.com/page/603
Selden
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I've amended these two articles, and replaced the images of 1st singularity bodies with a single image of the Great Whale ISO from Pacifica, which was the first image I could find of a Second Singularity transap.
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I think we could mention on those pages somewhere that an S:1 transapient could conceivably be housed in a human-scale body, assuming that the body was sophisticated enough. Such a body would probably need to be designed and constructed by an archailect.

I seem to remember that even an S:2 could be housed inside a structure of approximately human scale, but it would necessarily be very hot, and require plasma processors (and lots of power) to run at any respectable speed. But I might be misremembering that.
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/49d2d77d2227b
Optical Phased Arrays

A vertical space is missing between the paragraph ending with
OPA's surface.
and the next one, beginning with
Someone seeing the light


Ultimately a phase array can be used
should be
Ultimately a phased array can be used
Selden
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Fixed, and slightly edited. Thanks!
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/485acf5ed292b
Sentient Rights Protocols

needs to be updated with sentient -> sophont

as has already happened in the article
http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/485acb81cdb0b
Universal Declaration of Sophont Rights

except for its link to the Sentient Rights article.
Selden
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http://www.orionsarm.com/eg-article/56a75bc63a599
Void Factory

12 stellar-mass black holes and 12 neuron stars
should be
12 stellar-mass black holes and 12 neutron stars

proximity with some the lower mass cusps
should be
proximity with some lower mass cusps
or just
proximity with lower mass cusps
Selden
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