08-26-2016, 07:46 AM
http://orionsarm.com/eg-topic/45cbd68bc347f
Keter
by both cybernetic mission to backward planets, military measures to weed out the unfit and an ambitious program of evangelism within other domains.
would be better as
by cybernetic missions to backward planets, military measures to weed out the unfit, and an ambitious program of evangelism within other domains.
("Both" means two items, not three)
The article also does not mention the population levels of the various types of mondosophonts or transapients. Might that information have been accidentally deleted from the section "Territory and Population"?
Keter
by both cybernetic mission to backward planets, military measures to weed out the unfit and an ambitious program of evangelism within other domains.
would be better as
by cybernetic missions to backward planets, military measures to weed out the unfit, and an ambitious program of evangelism within other domains.
("Both" means two items, not three)
The article also does not mention the population levels of the various types of mondosophonts or transapients. Might that information have been accidentally deleted from the section "Territory and Population"?
Selden